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dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
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High Springs, Florida

0 posted 2001-05-26 10:16 PM



i whisper...
so as not to be heard
i whisper
the secrets of my heart
i whisper
so you wont run away
i whisper...
and you hear--
you hear
the things i didnt want to say
you hear
the secrets i try so to hide
you hear...
and still you stay a little longer
you hear me
when i whisper...

-dgvarner
10-12-00

© Copyright 2001 dgvarner - All Rights Reserved
Saunni
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1 posted 2001-05-26 10:35 PM


I feel like this is something I should have written. I so can relate. You did a great job writing this.  

Sauni

Sauni :)
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I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

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2 posted 2001-05-26 11:11 PM


DG~
This lady likes these thoughts~

'you hear...
and still you stay a little longer'


Good to see you, gal !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Tiersdin
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east coast
3 posted 2001-05-26 11:20 PM


I like this alot!

enjoyed reading!

*smiles*
~Tier

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
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4 posted 2001-05-27 12:09 PM


When you whisper...it is poetry!
pamela08
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since 2001-05-27
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California,USA
5 posted 2001-05-27 02:23 AM


your poem is very powerful and right to the point the line:
     "i whisper
       so you wont run away"
is a great line  

tracy pamela rios

Parker
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6 posted 2001-05-28 12:23 PM


Hey sweets, this is very good. I just comes across just like the whisper...  
Whisper some more to me... please.  

Parker

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03
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7 posted 2001-05-28 01:13 AM


Love the twist in this, dg.
And a nicely open ending too, I like that.

Krawdad
/:-}==
=#===

dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida
8 posted 2001-05-28 10:26 AM


SAUNNI..thanks a bunch  

MARGIE..glad you liked, my florida friend  

TIERSDIN..thanks for the *smile*..glad you enjoyed  

JLR..thanks!  what a cool compliment  

PAMELA..glad you liked that line..its a big truth line  

PARKER..come a little close baby..you know i'll whisper all you want...

KRAW..hey, good to see you    glad you liked this one..(i'm still gonna get into DARK to read YOUR stuff i've missed..!   )

hugs! g

the boy said, my name's johnny
and it might be a sin
but i'll take your bet
you're gonna regret
i'm the best there's ever been!
-cdaniels

Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
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Hurricane,WV
9 posted 2001-05-28 04:58 PM


really marvelous poem an it was a joy to read  
brian madden
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ireland
10 posted 2001-05-28 06:39 PM


some of the best words are whispers

"you are what you own in this land, you can be king and it all depends on the view and what you can see"  Whipping boy

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

11 posted 2001-05-28 06:43 PM


I hear ya!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Titia Geertman
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12 posted 2001-05-28 08:12 PM


I sure hear you, even when you whisper.

Great poem, thanks, Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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rascalx
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since 1999-08-25
Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA
13 posted 2001-05-30 06:34 AM


Beautiful! Even though you only whispered the secrets of your heart into these words, I "heard" them loud and clear. :-) Whisper some more :-) Well done!
dgvarner
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High Springs, Florida
14 posted 2001-06-05 01:41 PM


WATERSIGN..thanks so much!  

BRIAN..yes..   i believe so too..

IRISH..hey thanks for stopping in!  

TITIA..thanks for reading!  

RASCAL..if you'd stick around a little longer at a time..perhaps you'd get some more whispers...    thanks for reading  

hugs, g

the boy said, my name's johnny
and it might be a sin
but i'll take your bet
you're gonna regret
i'm the best there's ever been!
-cdaniels

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
15 posted 2001-07-14 12:16 PM



dg-
   i hear you...
   i'm loving this one!  
   my goodness, i've missed reading you...
   i've got alot of catching up to do..

   love and hugs and stuff,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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