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In Memorium (thanks sharon!)
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In Memorium (thanks sharon!) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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the mist before me rose In swirl, a pattern’s ancient map- a memory of soul. mirror’d moon to dance on smoke? Just a shadow’s slight-of–hand with reasoning revoked. dynamic art of air... shifting shades of layered hue- lines defined this man’s despair. I saw him creep past sexton’s keep. On into the sea of stones-- sparkled marble, white-too neat. but never did he raise his head. His foot was sure upon the path, without a pause, no sense of dread. no different than the others were. In this dark forest of the bones, somehow the man was sure. His sagging shoulders sagged. Then he stooped and placed on grave A luminescent flag. slipped from eye in christening. As he turned to me in smile, I swear I heard a flap of wing. Above his head a white dove swooped-- enwrapped the man protectively. I watched them as they disappeared. I knew he died for peace. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-26-2001).] |
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Death Member
since 2001-05-26
Posts 112Twilight |
Indeed a most, stunning word here more far more die for peace than any war |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my! You just did your country proud and the men who died to keep it free! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Very reverently presented. Melton |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, this is one of the best things that I've ever read from you. . . the picture you paint is one of reverance and rememberance. . . excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Serenity! Wonderful cadence and rhyme throughout, and you've captured the mood so beautifully portrayed in this piece, really well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, I agree with Sven. This is an excellent write. *L* Sy |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity, you may thank Sharon, but we thank you for this stunning tribute.... |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
excellent to the library A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow!!! You did great here!!! This is wonderful..it's a 'feeling' poem for sure - it is one of your best - it's perfectly written - and I love the images you used..don't thank me though..YOU did it!  |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Wonderful |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Amen ! One of your most thoughtful renders ! Thank you for caring and sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rows and rows to boast of death, but never did he raise his head. His foot was sure upon the path, without a pause, no sense of dread. Then he stopped before a stone no different than the others were. In this dark forest of the bones, somehow the man was sure. He crossed himself beneath moonlight. His sagging shoulders sagged. Then he stooped and placed on grave A luminescent flag. A glowing tear beneath moonlight slipped from eye in christening. As he turned to me in smile, I swear I heard a flap of wing. Above his head a white dove swooped-- enwrapped the man protectively. I watched them as they disappeared. I knew he died for peace. ======================= Karen this is amazing, awesome... is there nothing you cant write about and NOT write it to poetic perfection this gave me a chill...its hauntingly beautiful you took the imagery and defined it with your gift of rhyme. your talent as a writer is showcased in this very cool write.  meI'm hanging on your every word |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautiful penned.....excellent done Charisma |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity...Very touching and lovingly portrayed. Wonderful poem! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'd like to thank everybody--Death, Mysteria, 2Dalimit,Sven, Kit, Sy, Karilea, Bernie, forever, Marge, the sweet JM, Charisma, Martie, and especially Sharon for giving me the visual to work with. This was a special one for me as I learned to work in a different way. I'd also like to thank the Balladeer for his obvious tutelage and influence...you've all been great! Love to you all...and happy memories I hope, for Memorial Day! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
back to the top where this gift belongs ... and in my library cuz me spacey me forgot last time (no jokes about me memory)   and ... again... this is awesome sen... truly I'm hanging on your every word |
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