Open Poetry #14 |
Touching Inward - In Memoriam to all |
Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
touching inward time to let it all come forth, this touching inward too long the walls have stood between the feel and the real too often put aside the deepest part of this emotion’s flow let it go… let it go…. this, this is the moment, then to let the memories begin to mend to let the sorrows pour forth in rain to quench the soils where blood was lain and although left in weakened state leave open these, thy flooding gates allow thy pain to surface in full allow this inward touching pull and in memory, touch the stone and in touching inward we shall go on in memoriam write with grace, all others lose face; "Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Wonderful poem, you have a very good structure, it is different to many poems which is what makes it work . I enjoyed the subject content . Thanks . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady, Wonderful write, enoyed the read very much. *L* |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Looks like the raising of the flag over Mt. Suribachi ... always gives me chills ... my dad was there. If by "touching the stone" you mean the Vietnam memorial, I haven't yet summoned the intestinal fortitude to "touch" my buddies' names. One day ... Well written and a big THANK YOU. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Lady In White ...... Thank you for sharing this. It touches so many times and places...thoughts and feelings. Thank you. Bob |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
So many names, upon the walls. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
and although left in weakened state leave open these, thy flooding gates allow thy pain to surface in full allow this inward touching pull and in memory, touch the stone and in touching inward we shall go on WOW powerful writing. "across the unfair divide |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lady In White, We owe a great deal of gratitude to the veterans of this country. Most did not come from well to do famililes, but were the poorest of the poor and uneducated. For many, their only hope for a better future was to enlist. So many never had a future. I loudly applaud each of them. Thank you for this. Michael Proust- |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Well chosen words, Lady, for something that holds a catch in the voice, you speak strong and true. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is wonderful in structure and graphic |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a superb idea. . . passionately written, and thoughtfully done. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have met so many Americans now through the computer and a lot are Vietnam veterans. They still choke up as they speak, and still can not "touch the stone", and every new story makes a deeper hole in my heart for all who fought, as the nightmares, it seems, never leave them. It is a wonderful thing you do by honoring all those that fought for freedom! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lady this is a wonderful write and I enjoyed the read so much! |
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