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Open Poetry #14

You Identify

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-07-10 12:37 PM

You Identify

oh but you ranted
away in screams
of delight
in fright I cowered
under the I love yous
that raged between
my thighs
in cries
of
one

then you cried for
losses acquired
for you lost mean of
all transpired

that was when
I grew afraid
for you did not know
ecstasy when
you heard it

one of us
still naive to
the world
remain
forever
strapped
in

heart

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2001-07-10 12:51 PM

Wonderful read. Beautiful. Thought provoking.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2001-07-10 01:10 PM

You know, this is the first time that I've stopped to read your "critique" message. I like the way you've expressed it, very poetic! Loved the poem, but then all of your works are fantastic!

*smiles*
~Tier

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

3 posted 2001-07-10 01:23 PM

"one of us
still naive to
the world
remain
forever
strapped
in

heart"

This is very perceptive and true. Nice work, Deca.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

4 posted 2001-07-10 02:41 PM

Sensual and beautiful.

"Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-04-28 04:01 AM

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-04-28 04:49 PM

Deca!! Deca!! Deca!!
How could I have missed this?
Oh maybe I wasn't here then...or was I?
Wonderfully sensual write.

~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

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