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The Legend of Hummingbird and Crane
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The Legend of Hummingbird and Crane |
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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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The Legend of Hummingbird and Crane In the land of Cherokee, Dwelt a maiden, fair to see. Hummingbird and crane were each Smitten with this southern peach! So they talked and both agreed That there was a serious need. One of them must go away. Then they heard the maiden say, They should fly a race to see Whose bride she would finally be! Around the world was the course And returning to the source. Off they went. The hummingbird Thought it really quite absurd! After all, he was so fast. He didn't think the crane would last. Every night, he stopped to rest, Confident he was the best. Crane, however, flew all night And was quickly out of sight. Time went by and then one day, Crane appeared and made his way To the maiden's house to wed. When she saw him though, she said He was much too plain and gray. She was teasing anyway! Left him standing in the dirt. Tired, mad and mostly hurt! He launched an aerial display, Which he uses, still, today. So when you see his frenzied dance, You'll know it's rooted in romance! Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 07-09-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ah... a story teller! I enjoyed!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ You certainly have a knack for this ! ! How wonderful to share the legends in such an appealing form. It's just so enjoyable to read your pieces.  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
....this was a great story. Now, is it the hummingbird flaps his wings so fast in a failed attempt to catch up..... huuuuuuuuuuum, I wonder? |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Cpat Hair: Thanks for reading and I appreciate your comments. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Marge: Thanks very much! This was fun to write and I'm happy you liked it! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Lighthousebob: You are probably right! All these years the hummingbird has been trying to catch up! Betty Lou Hebert |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I enjoyed your poetic rendition of this legend very much... well done! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
suthern: thank you for reading and commenting. Glad you liked this. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Mishtheelf Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 68 |
Eye candy, for sure! At first, I thought the rhyme pattern was too quick, but I fell into the melody of it readily, and it turned out to add much flavor!  Thanks for sharing |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Mishtheelf: I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for commenting. Betty Lou Hebert |
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