Open Poetry #14 |
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Dreams Passed On |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) ![]() |
From within, inside my sleep, and the vain of wakefulness I lay exhumed, still sweet perfumed, still wishing to be kissed I lay exposed, of feelings shown, the inner ache of this Torn of love, at the seams, the wish of life, inside my dreams Where flickers show she still is here, perfumed virtue disappears There she is, the world to me, and now I’ve found paralysis My hero mumbles, I have worth, to claim within his bones He lied through teeth, surrounding wreath, “I died here so alone” My body crumbling, words are stumbling “sir take me to your home” We lay in bed, I climb his head, we both share a stunning dream His, a song, mine fades ‘fore long neither one of us will scream Boys in beds, soaked, flailing, sad, but here our sins atoned She wakes from dreams, in lonely bed, that once was in my head Where aching sweeps, her heart in two, the living and the dead [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-10-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Don't understand why this sat so lonely of replies for so long! This is outstanding, waltie! (A sonnet? Educate me! LOL) Very smooth nice flow and great construction! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Walt, I guess I'm on a roll with your poems 2day as I took a peak at another you had wrote... Anyhow, I enjoyed the read sweetie and thank you once again for sharing a 'splendid' write from your pen... *~coco~* |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank yuh yuh its a waltyuherian sonnet!! |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I am so glad I checked this before getting off to work. Nice Walt. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ This is really, really good ! ! WOW ... greatly enjoyed. Love the choice of music too ! ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
this is a fantabilous sonnet...melancholy but mmmmm...I like it |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walty, you're full of surprises ya know? and I love em. Great poem m'friend I enjoyed. Maree ![]() "little miss understood |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
this is very unique. it reminds me when an actor on tv looks up into the sky and says "I wonder what that would be like...?" and an encapsulating sound accompanies the vibration of the tv screen and the actor is taken away. this is a very smart thought. |
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