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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Even in the dark I spied a sun's red beam stretching grasp of fingertips the splitting of the seam of midnight blue and sky in dew sparkles dazzlement of hue- with profundity of truth Far past the glance of me and you, there be a path of universe a script awaits, a dance of yearn notation thatched every rhyme rotation maddening keeps time to spite the things I should have learned... Within me now, an ember glows, In the darkness rose does grow tightly wrapped a bloom in bud Petals open to the sun lowly, slowly, Everything I ever was made war with me... Everything, and not at all confetti swept after the ball-- piece after piece my soul in sweep jig-saw puzzles in a heap (tell me, which cut do I keep, to make the picture whole?) |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, the ones that are left behind are only the mistakes we all make, and learn from, so new growth, like the rose bud, blooms forth from us, until we are in full bloom...gentle smile, you have such a wonderful way with your words, always a pleasurable and thoughtful read |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
3 reads of this, and I still can't pretend I understand it, although the essence is coming through, I think. However, every time I read it, among the wonderful sounds and flow here, this line stood out: Everything I ever was made war with me... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So good, girl how do you do this? Besides the line Virginia mentioned, this is the best, to me. "Everything, and not at all confetti swept after the ball-- piece after piece my soul in sweep jig-saw puzzles in a heap (tell me, which cut do I keep, to make the picture whole?)" I think the pieces will fall together fine, in time. This is a great statement of confusion and hope. Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the splitting of the seam of midnight blue and sky in dew sparkles dazzlement of hue- with profundity of truth Far past the glance of me and you, there be a path of universe a script awaits, a dance of yearn notation thatched every rhyme rotation maddening keeps time to spite the things I should have learned... Within me now, an ember glows, In the darkness rose does grow tightly wrapped a bloom in bud Petals open to the sun lowly, slowly, Everything I ever was made war with me... ================================= so many images...so many perfect lines... so many well worked metaphors... so many mirrors.... love ya me twin me Feels like Im dancing with truth and wisdom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, When your dealt that kind of a poker hand, you through it in. Enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I liked the idea that you had a single rose in all of this....the whole of it reminded me of a glorious ballroom and two left behind, still enchanted with only the dance they could hear, and only the rose of the corsage between them.... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
every rhyme rotation maddening keeps time to spite the things I should have learned... DId I hear my name mentioned there!?! lol sorry bad joke, WELL Seren. wow powerful words, my southern poet. I need a few more reads of this, I think. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
THIS is stunning !!!!!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I liked it  |
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