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Inwardly Unraveling
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Inwardly Unraveling |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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A dismal saturation of thought Seeps through the fibers ~Of Me~ The poignancy like acid-- Searing deep As the pain you long ago Inflicted on this weary spirit. Tiny whisps of memory Sting my shivered skin ~Everyday~ Reminding me Of the humiliation, The degradation Forced down upon me. My edges are frayed By the secrets that inwardly ~Unravel~ The darkest hollows Of my soul... And I wonder if I could simply ~Reach out~ And find someone To wind these loose threads Back into The breathing tapestry Of me. *Krista Knutson* |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wow, Krista......another painful, yet powerful, piece here. Well done..... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this indeed speaks of one who longs to be together again. . . very well phrased. . . they just come out of the page. . . excellent!!! --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Wonderful imagery...you express your thoughts so well. ~Krista |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And I wonder if I could simply ~Reach out~ And find someone To wind these loose threads Back into The breathing tapestry Of me. ============================= yes baby you can... powerful, heartwrenching write Krista... we heal in the self discovery and the release of the words... reach out when youre ready hugs and its great to see you back posting again. We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
are yuh falling apart. Very sophisticated write I liked it hugely o yuh |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow! I can't pick a favorite part.....I liked it all so well! very vivid imagery.....excellent writing  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Krista, this is so very sad yet so beautifully written m'dear And I wonder if I could simply ~Reach out~ And find someone To wind these loose threads Back into The breathing tapestry Of me. Indeed you can sweetie hugs Maree |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Stinging words, Krista... As always, your emotion echoes fluently throughout your work. Sad, but very powerfully written to echo a previous reply. A perfect ending as well. Michael |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A hopeful ending. The colorless cloak of humiliation and drab design of degradation are in reality only donned voluntarily. Those who would degrade are themselves degraded, humiliators themselves shamed. Hope springs eternal in the breast of truth. Enjoyed. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Nicely written..enjoyed your creative words ~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Extremely good writing, I really enjoyed your work on this one. If I made you smile today then I did my job! |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
Oooooo. Oo Oo Ooo... LOL I really liked this one, Krista, really REALLY good. I mean it. A dismal saturation of thought Seeps through the fibers etc. Those two lines are especially good. Lovely imagery. And the last verse, too, is extremely well done. Yes, I know, me and my darkness. ^_^ Excellent, excellent job. Erin |
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