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Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-07-03 08:28 PM

I walked right up to your door
reached out and rang the bell
after what you did, I’m ready
to consign your soul to hell

I saw the look on your face!!!
and then your face turned gray
it fell, it rose, you opened your mouth
it turned red and stayed that way!

She walked up behind you
smiled when she saw me
you sputtered, turned, I just smiled
here was the door, I was the key

You sat down and so did we
your wife and your little fling
I was so happy inside
it was all I could do not to sing!

We told you that we knew about
the betrayal and the lies
we never shed a tear for you
an enlightened woman never cries

We almost laughed when you saw
we knew about the other two
in fact we tried to tell them
but they still believed in you

She told you to get out right then
don't take anything but your clothes
you cried, you pleaded, you pouted
as you wiped your runny nose

Silence on this side of the door
as you slowly walked away
we smiled in newfound friendship
today, we made you pay.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-07-03 08:43 PM

O-M-G!!!!! WOOOOOOOOOO HOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! You rock dear PoetdeVine!Wow! I Love this!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-07-03 09:06 PM

Revenge is sweet, sometimes. One day you must forgive him and yourself

I gotta say, though, you DO ROCK!

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

3 posted 2001-07-03 09:19 PM

I agree and you do rock! You go girl!!!
Hugs,
~Krista

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

4 posted 2001-07-04 01:25 AM

Now that is how to take the bull by the.... (horns) or whatever and make him pay.

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

5 posted 2001-07-04 02:22 AM

Oh my this was great

I enjoyed this and I concur with what our PoetFriend Inot2b has stated...

*~coco~*

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-07-04 03:14 AM

Awesome, and I liked the way you let the last poem lead into this one, just fantastic work!

If I made you smile today then I did my job!
~* Mysteria *~

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-07-04 09:56 AM

I have to say, I love this one!! Go get 'em!!!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2001-07-04 10:35 AM

Poet deVine,
Just a comment on the writing. A plus

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-07-04 04:39 PM

personally. . . I've always thought that fireworks were in g flat. . .

great job. . .

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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

10 posted 2001-07-05 08:51 PM

Its so good to see your work flowing!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

11 posted 2001-07-06 06:55 PM

there's a message to this one, and I got it~!

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

12 posted 2001-07-06 08:19 PM

Great writing, Sharon! I enjoyed this very much!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

13 posted 2015-03-22 11:06 PM

Makes me smile and cheer silently.

A

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