Open Poetry #14 |
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Beveled Thoughts |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Beveled Thoughts The me in the mirror in glass, bevel edged lips speaking thoughts of memories dredged angles of words, twisted in form lines, uneven unmet, cooling warm The glass corners chipped no halo wear I am not who you think or imagine, with sigh Expressed in the looking a heart in despair a need of forgiving, one self in repair If only the words that could travel by line were heeded in context absorbed by a mind understood in their meaning each word, caring viewed then what once had been always could again be renewed... If I walked through the looking to be nearest you would alone still I be, would you come into view If I called for a voice just a need for a word would the silence of empty be the all that I heard On the walls of morn's wake I am beveled by two in the looking glass take I am mirrored to you. ~A~ |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Very nice written........ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
This had a nice rhythym to it, particularly the last few stanzas. |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The me in the mirror in glass, bevel edged lips speaking thoughts of memories dredged angles of words, twisted in form lines, uneven unmet, These were my favorite lines... clever word play here ties a beveled edge,angles and memories all together in a nice tight package...good work!!!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
An interesting write, and one that I will probably read over several times, to get it from all angles... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
To find comfort in thoughts of a past that is gone, to find peace with departed to make us feel strong, to torture ourselves for the words that weren't said, puts the mind in a spin and a storm in our head. Life is life, we do the best we can. Nice poem, enjoyed it a lot. Keep up the good work. Rick |
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