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A Weakness
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A Weakness |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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A Weakness A weakness you would share is felt otherwhere though aired with reticence still seeks exigence A warm hand extended is well intended though chilled by distance still grips insistence A shadow in dusky hue is there to be with you though unseen percipience still is in persistence "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
appear to be a preponderance of "ances" (smiling) I enoyed the language and the form..nice work and nicely told... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like to see people playing with language, it kind of reinforces my permission to do so, too. Enjoyed the sounds of the words as well as their use. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nice flow and repetition, Krawdad.  All writing comes |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
the hand of a friend unlimited warmth given never knows any chill helen |
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