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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-07-02 02:49 PM

Stereophonic
Equestrian’s insight comes
Hearing horse’s neigh

Muscle tenses tight
From feel of hoof to breathing
Left, right, then left, right

Equilibrium
Balancing neighs heard lightly
Pulse begins again

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-02 02:51 PM

Please explain the form Senryu to me... by what rules is it written?

I enjoyed the images here...and the not quite element...

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2001-07-02 02:57 PM

Any 5-7-5 syllable count that does not pertain to nature, is themed as senryu...or at least, that is my understanding...

so when you mix nature with people, it becomes senryu.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-07-02 03:10 PM

Thank you... I see the form now..and might even be able to atempt one myself...

lunatic
Member

since 2001-04-20

Posts 172

4 posted 2001-07-02 03:12 PM

Horses are nice. Senryu even better.

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

5 posted 2001-07-02 03:24 PM

Red-roan courser neighs
Equestrian finds paced grace
equipoised finesse

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 2001-07-02 03:56 PM

Swift as lightning bolt
Across moonlit horizon
Mustang's silhouette

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-07-02 03:57 PM

Wonderful LIW! I just love horses!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

8 posted 2001-07-02 05:48 PM

I shall not attempt one, though glad that you did. Thank you.

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2001-07-02 10:02 PM

I like these

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

10 posted 2001-07-03 08:41 AM

Stallion rears up
Hooves come crashing down again
Pretty Kitty runs

Stallion bares teeth
Nips at Pretty Kitty
Too long tail no more

Pretty Kitty ain't
Pretty Kitty needs a tail
Long John rides away.

Nan - Is that how I'm supposed to do it? Now remember, Pandora mustn't know that I'm trying to write pretty poetry.

Lady - You write such beautiful poetry.

[This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 07-03-2001).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

11 posted 2001-07-03 09:53 AM

Well done indeed

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