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Eternal In Time - inspired by Aimster's poem
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Eternal In Time - inspired by Aimster's poem |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Eternal In Time  Our love is finesse of divinity of sensuous sand on a Venus-blessed shore won'drous waves caress a kiss of impress celebrating our bond with a ravishing roar ~ We stand beside the crystalline ocean reveries of you wash over my mind, I know that our union is eternal - a sacred gift of fortune's find ~ Some things in life are meant to be like Neptune's playground of emerald-blue some moments are born of destiny just like the peace found within you ~ Heavenly hushs of horizon harmonize as sparkling sky melts into soulmate sea, you are rhapsody of ruby rapture... tidings of awe on chords of melody ~ Today's embrace is tomorrow's breath in yawn of dawn of the hands of time, you are fated ying to my yang of fairytale dancing in a dream on coast of chime ~ In the eyes of my heart's deep fortress you fly on high with angelic face, oh, how I adore the bliss of you my sweet darling of glorious grace! ~ Mystic sea seduces with wisps of wave calling us to chance the rapids of romance, and we gladly accept it's beckoning as incantation soars on butterfly trance ~ The secrets of the tide remind me that we are cadence to universe of rhyme, now kindred spirits of Eden's pleasure evermore etched in time ~ When yesteryear lays down for Winter and laughter of youth has long since gone a new generation of lovers shall hear the legacy of our beautiful song ~ Our wings shall entwine in the afterlife, as partners in heaven...husband and wife, 'tis true, my dear, we are meant to be... that last piece to the puzzle of destiny's mystery ~ My heart is yours, as your beat is mine a journey through God's garden, so sublime ~ Yes, I am yours, as you are mine... forever making love through smiles of time  By Melissa P. Monette |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Milessa, This is about as good as it gets. Love the way you write. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Mel, Well when you first presented your work to me...i thought it was beautiful but now that i am blessed with being able to see the final product complete with music and graphic, im awestruck. you have left me speechless. i truly admire you as a poet. you are a very talented write, and you have my complete admiration and friendship. take care of yourself and i'll be in touch soon. amy  "but i see your true colors, |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Love the piks and the music, but most of all I love the romaticism you bring to mind. well done indeed. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I liked the rhythm and flow to this, and the internal rhyme thing is a favorite device too! Smooth, polished and deliciously romantic. Enjoyed much! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I agree with Seymour... know not what else to say... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
and you say that my work is good. . .  this is beautiful Melissa. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Okay if that isn't 1st Class I don't know what is! Melissa girl, you got the music, graphics and the wonderful poetry happening in the finest way, and you gotta know me being the "graphic granny" I LOVE this, and love on girl, love on! If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear, sweet Melissa; Wow! You are so gifted! This is the most beautiful love poem I've ever read! Thank you for pointing me towards it. Now if I could be granted such a love, I can send this to him! Love, Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Melissa, You have composed a magnificent tapestry of words, photos and music to comprise a MASTERPIECE. Your obvious talents shine here. This Jewel is going right into my Library Collection. WELL DONE my friend! Dennis :^) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Melissa, thank you for pointing me to this poem...i enjoyed the read very much(the alliteration didn't slip past me by the way) and you should be reasonably proud of it....  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ You have a graceful romantic hand at penning these beauties. I'm soooooooo pleased to read this beauty. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Blaec Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 130The Sunshine State |
What can I say that hasn't already been said? This is beautiful! Kris |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Our love is finesse of divinity of sensuous sand on a Venus-blessed shore won'drous waves caress a kiss of impress celebrating our bond with a ravishing roar ~ We stand beside the crystalline ocean reveries of you wash over my mind, I know that our union is eternal - a sacred gift of fortune's find ~ Some things in life are meant to be like Neptune's playground of emerald-blue some moments are born of destiny just like the peace found within you ============================= Melis...this is very impressive... wow girl..where does one get this kind of inspire... (i gotta get me some of that) There is so much to see here... the cadence..the inner rhyme...the alliteration, the imagery...the very cool poetic wording and phrases and also the references to the forces of Nature and fantasy like Neptune and Venus and etc... then its all tied up in a bow of romantic devotion and presentation done perfect. Your taking your writing to new levels with this...and its lovely to watch you fly very well done poetess M. jm We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
You've taken much time and thought to pen this lovely piece, Melybee....well done, dear, very well done.... |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
hey missy, thanks for telling me about this poem, it is gorgeous, i'm in awe here |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Melissa~ wow.....this is so pretty! "We stand beside the crystalline ocean reveries of you wash over my mind, I know that our union is eternal - a sacred gift of fortune's find" this is my favorite part so perfect! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) You are soooooooooo romantic, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always shine like heaven in the beauty of true love! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is soooooooo gorgeous, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-04-2002 06:14 PM).] |
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