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Defeat |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Defeat  You know not of misery... you know not of battered hell, you cannot comprehend childhood lost or the entrapment of a heart-raped shell ~ Unable to face reflection's truth in the fray of embittered years waiting for release of peace in miracles enraged further by unending tears, I am weary at sorrow's service fighting uneven odds in strain of vain inner demons corrupt in this lose-lose battle setting aflame foolish pride of blame, my finger points down wrong avenues travelling the cowardice road to conclusion, I accuse fate for destruction of my path... too young to be in seclusion of delusion, I sit in dark edged corners of me suffocating in introspection of blue mourning the early death of faith and dreams that won't come true, paying the burden of soul enslaved to madness I lock my ill-pumping heart on a shelf failing to save what's already lost unable to accept that I've defeated myself ~ You know not of misery or mind's convulsion in scream of shell, you cannot comprehend adulthood lost or the torment of depression's spell  By Melissa P. Monette [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 07-02-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sure I can. But the feeling that no one could possibly understand is what compounds it all. Well written purge here, Melissa...You write the dark well! |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ditto Serenity, and once you start opening up and letting it, that is when the healing begins. Well-written piece here Melissa, which I am sure many, many can relate to. I only wish I could say I didn't. You echo the terror of inner demons well. If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ohh Mel- This was so well written hon. Written with such depth, and your usual grace... but you capture the "dark side" so beautifully. Yes I found this beautiful in its own way. No one should be able to relate to this poem or its tremendous pain, though I'm sure many can. Sadly, I know I can. Take care. P.S. Wrote you an E. Amy  "but i see your true colors, |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I guess not. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Oh..perhaps not your personal type..but I have dealt with my own..and will say your writing here reflected much i could relate to from times past... nicely written and expressed.. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Inner defeat is the worst kind. For it holds the power to cripple us if we let it. I know you have not been defeated, my friend. Best wishes to you. All writing comes |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Depression flirted once with me, and when I saw the person I was to become in its grasp, I said "no"... not so easy for some to do, I realize, but I never want to visit those depths again.... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I hope this is simply a poem and not your own life's situation. Either way, know that I wish you well. This is very well written. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you can always explore the depths of emotion fully my friend. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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