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Trillium
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0 posted 2001-07-01 05:59 PM





A midnight hour spawned the sight
Of ghostly specters, all in white.
They shimmered in the corners, where,
Their moans and sighings filled the air.
I bade them all be gone from me,
But they ignored me I could see.
I wondered why they had appeared
And as the morning hour neared,
I watched them fade away until,
My room was empty and quite still.

Is this an omen I should fear
And will they ever reappear?
I have a feeling that they might
Upon some other sleepless night.
They are the dreams that didn't grow.
They are the secrets that I know.
They are regrets for things that I
Had planned to do, but didn't try!







Betty Lou Hebert

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Lone Wolf
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1 posted 2001-07-01 06:01 PM


The only way to keep them at bay is to get out there and do those things!  This was very original, Trillium.  Great write.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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2 posted 2001-07-01 06:04 PM


"they are dreams that didn't grow
they are secrets that I know.
They are regrets for things that I
had planned to do, but didn't try"
================================
Betty~

Can you hear that?  That's the gulp in my throat, how I relate! I read this three times before replying, your use of rhyme, message and theme is excellent and very touching. This gives me much to think about and perhaps strive for. Into my library this goes~

Take care,
Melissa~

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3 posted 2001-07-01 08:20 PM


Now this was very insightful, and if you can believe it, tomorrow I am actually going to finish some things thanks to your poem!  Great job on this one, and don't ever let it be said words don't move mountains, as that is exactly what you are doing (well a pile of compost actually)...lol  

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job!    ~* Mysteria *~

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4 posted 2001-07-01 09:10 PM


Lone Wolf:  I know you're right! Thanks for commenting.

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2001-07-01 09:12 PM


Melissa:  Thanks for putting this poem in your library. I'm glad it appealed to you and I appreciate your nice comments.

Betty Lou Hebert

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6 posted 2001-07-01 09:13 PM


Mysteria:  Thanks!  Moving a mountain of compost is a major accomplishment I'd say!
Happy Canada Day.  I too, am Canadian but have lived in the States for many years.

Betty Lou Hebert

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7 posted 2001-07-01 09:17 PM


We all go through this, very well expressed!
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8 posted 2001-07-01 11:18 PM


Thanks Walker.  

Betty Lou Hebert

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9 posted 2001-07-02 07:13 AM


Well I think Mr Poe would like this one..
very cool poem Trillium..loved the cadence and melodics...
as well as the stark imagery and ominous theme.
very well done poetess  
jm

We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide open if we just find the right words to say.
~E. McCain

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10 posted 2001-07-02 05:09 PM


Janet Marie:  Thank you for your nice comments. I hadn't thought about this from a Poe viewpoint, but there is some shred of resemblance there I guess. I enjoy the comparison at any rate!

Betty Lou Hebert

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