Open Poetry #14 |
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Between Layers |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Between Layers Almost touching you, I am between layers of clear. The shine of once upon a time is discarded among silver stars floating in the shadow on this moonlit night. Summer's warmth, once holding all promise of you, tempers the air with your memory. Tears falling like stardust, glisten my pillow as I soak in the thoughts of you. And between the night's layers, in dream upon dream, I am shadowed until morning comes. Until I gaze into the mirror to see only the clear once again. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Your images are presented well. Gloom |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Oh how beautifully painful....I've felt like that before. Your imagery is fabulous. ~Krista |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Almost touching you, I am between layers of clear. The shine of once upon a time is discarded among silver stars floating in the shadow on this moonlit night. =================== this is well written with the employ of imagery, metaphor and emotion... bittersweet and aching well done Poetess Alice take care jm We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is extremely touching in all points, I enjoyed the feeling I got from reading this. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
You have captured the metamorphosis well, Alice. Nice write. ![]() All writing comes |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Professor if my love comes through my words, then and only then have I presented my images well. Thank you, Alice ~Krista glad you saw the beauty felt through my pain jm yes...I would describe this as bittersweet and aching, thank you Alice Irish Rose hoping the touching was of a good feel then thank you Alice Lone Wolf Thank you for your kind words Alice |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
An emotional tale, thanks for sharing. enjoyed the read. "Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Thank you Brian, pleased you enjoyed. ~A~ |
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