Poetic Paranoia (thanks again to PdV for inspiration)

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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-07-01 12:49 PM

Somebody's out there.
Somebody's looking at me.
Somebody's out there.
Making the dreams I don't believe
too real...

Somebody's talking.
The whisper floats like leaves from trees.
Somebody's talking.
Giggles of little girls with eyes
on me...

Somebody's inside.
Someone is standing much too near.
Somebody's inside.
Someone is playing upon my fears
concealed...

Somebody's laughing.
Someone is laughing as I weep.
Somebody's laughing.
Someone is stealing all my dreams
of sleep...

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2001-07-01 12:56 PM

serenity-
   well, you know what they say...
   just because you're paranoid,
   doesn't mean they're not
   out to get you!

   this is really cool, my friend..
   i'm liking it lots!!

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-07-01 01:03 AM

Enjoyed your paranoid lines. There is always someone keeping a watch on you, so you'll never be lonely.

[This message has been edited by inot2B (edited 07-01-2001).]

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

3 posted 2001-07-01 01:14 AM

I'm watching and I like what I see

great poem!
~Krista

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 2001-07-01 05:44 AM

LOL...darned if you weren't right!!!!

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-07-01 06:55 PM

for some reason. . . I know what you're going through. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

6 posted 2001-07-01 07:50 PM

A bit of paranoia is not all that bad, but then I ignore what the past will bring out, as it is done...really liked the way you brought out what all of us feel at times...very gentle smile

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-07-01 09:13 PM

Fantastic poem, but I won't make the dreams that you don't dream be real *wink*!

If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2001-07-01 10:20 PM

I want to thank everybody--this time I managed to give myself the creeps!!! Thanks for reading...oh, and would somebody please shut the blinds?

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

9 posted 2001-07-02 12:01 PM

Only somebody ... good! I thought it was everybody

esclandre
Member

since 2001-06-11

Posts 62
Northern California

10 posted 2001-07-02 01:15 PM

you mean they're not really watching?

interesting in that I read it as iff it were lighthearted, yet the depth is there plainly. strange conundrum that in no way takes away from the value of the poem.

cool

Esclandre

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2001-07-02 02:05 PM

(chuckling)... So very well done with a mixture of humor and seriousness... one could indeed adopt it as the mantra for
government agencies....

I enjoyed!!

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