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Tim
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0 posted 2001-06-30 04:00 PM



They say that up in heaven,
...streets are paved with gold,
Grand mansions float on silver clouds,
...at least so, I've been told.

I disagree, I'll tell you why,
...although I've never been,
I even doubt, that when I die,
...that God will let me in.

I've done some ruminating,
...what's past those pearly gates,
What splendored realm in heaven's high,
...for mortal man awaits.

If heaven is nirvana,
...our home forevermore,
What use is there for golden streets,
...for silver clouds galore?

I'd sooner walk on spring's first grass,
...beside a prairie stream,
Lie beneath oak's canopy,
...protected from sun's beam.

A gentle breeze of summer,
...to whisper in my ear,
Amongst the feral creatures,
...'mid nature's green revere.

Now that I think, I must confess,
...to heaven I oft go,
Upon the plains of Kansas,
...in heaven's preview show.

© Copyright 2001 Tim - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-06-30 04:22 PM


Well Sir, you know I cannot very well disagree with this!

it's been awhile since we've seen you...welcome home!

I skipped through this all the way!

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2001-06-30 05:06 PM


Tim~
So   to see you !

This piece just moves the needle right off the meter !

Wonderfully done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Martie
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3 posted 2001-06-30 06:05 PM


Tim--Hi, my friend...so good to read you again...the plains or Kansas or the meadows of California...both heaven for sure!
Honeybee
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4 posted 2001-06-30 07:11 PM



What a beautiful testiment of dedication to your state!  Into my library this goes  

Take care,
Melissa~

Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2001-06-30 09:54 PM


Must be a wonderful place, the plains of Kansas

Matches your poem I guess.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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Nan
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6 posted 2001-07-01 08:47 AM


Nice to see ya, Tim...

Your final resting Chambers shall no doubt be heavenly, m'friend...

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
7 posted 2001-07-01 09:18 AM


Tim,

nice to see ya and wonderful poem
you've penned here. great imagery!
some really fantastic lines in this
one. take care.

amy  

"but i see your true colors,
shining through...
i see your true colors
and that's why i love you"
~phil collins~

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
8 posted 2001-07-02 03:02 AM



Tim-
   this is awesome!  
   very beautifully penned...

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



serenity blaze
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9 posted 2001-07-02 04:08 AM


This is wonderful--and I couldn't agree more! Loved the flow to this too. Enjoyed much!  
brian madden
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ireland
10 posted 2001-07-03 03:17 PM


Tim, as the others said spot on, for me heaevn is the green pastures that surround my house, but with a clear blue sky which we don't get very often. Really enjoyed this poem.

"Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh

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