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Dancing In The Rain
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Dancing In The Rain |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sitting at the river watching the rain echo off the surface of the water. Not really thinking about anything Its one of those moments of solitude Where everything else is gone and its just you. Its a soft rain the kind that tempts you to dance So I do Standing knee deep in the cool running water hands uplifted to the rain hips swaying to the music of the river In almost primal need to feel the water. Unthinking my hands tug away my shirt Stripping the world away Reveling in the freedom The rain comes harder Making my skin tingle Then comes the sun. |
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Rain Junior Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 21Atlanta, GA |
A well captured moment. I loved the set up of this. Compliments it nicely! |
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Snowdwen Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 75Louisiana |
Nicely done.. it makes me want to go outside and play in the rain. I think my fav. part was.. "Unthinking my hands tug away my shirt Stripping the world away Reveling in the freedom" Nicely said and well done! great peace.. Can't wate to read more! "You live you learn and life moves on" |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Very good, Paula.....this reminds me of a little flower-child I once knew.*sigh* Mike |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I love these kind of moments and love the way you've written about this one. Nicely done. Poeminister |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Ohh...I love this.I do..simply that, and I can say no more.  still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I really love this verse! "Its a soft rain the kind that tempts you to dance So I do Standing knee deep in the cool running water hands uplifted to the rain hips swaying to the music of the river In almost primal need to feel the water." Excellent work Paula! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I would have liked to have seen this one Paula....James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ This is MARVELOUS ! The words gently cascade down the page. Beautiful thoughts ~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Dance and be free...loved the format! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Oh yes I felt every drop... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula sister of my heart, utterly truly outstanding love. You have really written a special gem here. I adore it you have such a wondrous talent love, beautifully done. Every single word is a sparkling jewel. Take care love as always Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rain...I'm glad you enjoyed the dance...thank you Snowden...thank you sweetie...you are sweet to say so Mike...lol you sure it wasnt me? Poeminister...they dont happen often enough do they? Temptress...LOL you said enough thank you ethome...somehow I just knew you would like that sweet poet man...thank you James...I will dance for you anytime you know that Marge...its just the rain...makes me wanna dance every time...thanks JLR...you dance too ok? vandana...thanks forevernbluejeans...good Marsha...girl you do go on...Im so spoiled with your praise...thank you |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
the beauty of the rain and dancing.. You capture this nicely. enjoyed. I am many. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 wonderful! |
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