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Beyond my Understanding
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Beyond my Understanding |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Beyond my understanding Elusive and reserved Your countenance withstanding The hurt so undeserved Naivete is tainted When fantasies fall through And expectations painted Become a blurry view Could premonition alter The course decided on? Did intuition falter The plans that you had drawn? I wish that I had warned you I wish that I had known Now we share disappointment From which we both have grown I wish it didn't happen I guess you can't change fate Beyond my understanding Why often Truth comes late If you had only chosen The road on which I stand, You'd never have been frozen In someone else's land I'd be your shield of virtue Beside you, night and day, For I could never hurt you Or throw your love away Your sensitive emotions -- Ignored and misconstrued By some whose only notions Were in the realm of lewd I wish that I had warned you I wish that I had known Now we share disappointment From which we both have grown I wish it didn't happen I guess you can't change fate Beyond my understanding Why often Truth comes late Too often it's the blatant Somehow we cannot see Until the knowledge latent Becomes reality My sympathies are with you, For I know how it feels To lose something of value In one of life's ordeals But rest assured on one thing: On me you can depend If ever you need something I'm there for you, my friend. (Copyright 1992 by: MARK V SHELDON) "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I like this much--and I have been very absent from the forum...so I welcome you Mark...you wrote this with me heart methinks...thank you. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The meter and rythum and rhyme is so very well done in this poem Mark...It's very reader friendly....This verse is a powerful one... "I wish that I had warned you I wish that I had known Now we share disappointment From which we both have grown I wish it didn't happen I guess you can't change fate Beyond my understanding Why often Truth comes late" Much truth here and many suffer the same affliction with the said same truth! I really enjoyed this piece! |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
This is completely awesome. What an excellent show of kindness, understanding, friendship and support. I like this more than I can express. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Serenity, I thank you for the warm welcome and for the nice words. This poem is for all who can relate to personal circumstances with loved ones -- circumstances that did not at all have to transpire the way that they did. Thanks so much for reading and replying. Eric, thank you too for the heartfelt reply. This is a strong compliment coming from a fellow musician. Glad you enjoyed. ThUnDeRkYsS, thank you so much for your response. I'm happy that this resonated with you in such a strong manner. When something is truly inspired, perhaps others sense that magic themselves, at times... "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
So much truth in this one. All you can do is be there for them. They must tread the path that they have chosen to take. Great write, Mark!  All writing comes by the grace of God. -Ralph Waldo Emerson [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 06-30-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, stop that..you are seeing way too much here inside my heart. This one so portrays the situation. And it is very hard to understand . I still don't. Much appreciated this one. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Lone Wolf: thanks for reading, and you are so very right... we can offer our hand in love and help, but if it is not accepted (or sometimes even seen, for that matter...), there's little we can do but suffer with them. Thanks for reading and responding. Sandra, sometimes my "remote-viewing" can get the better of me... sorry! :-] I truly am sorry if you've found yourself in this kind of situation... I know what it's like, all too well and can only suggest to pan for the golden nuggets and let the river of experience flow away the rest... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Mark, Once again you have penned another chapter in my own heart. Just beautiful! Elise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A gentle slow rhythm in this, I like the cadence and for a moment, thought I could even hear a quiet guitar in the background... well done, Mark! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Elise, I seem to have hit a vein with what unfortunately many women seemingly have experienced from/with a lot of guys... This poem is (naturally) from a male perspective, but from one who is sensitive and respectful of a woman (and plural, for that matter). May other men out there learn to care for others than just themselves! Especially when dealing with the fragile hearts of women! Thank you again for reading and commenting. Sunshine: Actually, this one is written with a "Depeche Mode"/dark Euro sound in mind, but you would have hit the bullseye regarding the guitar for "IN MY NEXT LIFE"... Thanks for reading. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." "Everyone can hear; few can listen." [This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (edited 06-30-2001).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
"The truth often comes late",what a great line. Loved the poem! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thanks, Walker. Indeed it does, for it seems that most of us never listen to that annoying little voice inside of each of us that usually gets the pleasure of delivering the habitual "told you so"... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem is flawless in meter, but the strength (besides the meaning of it) is your tremendous talent for rhyming. My hat's off to you, dear poet, for a poem well written and perfect in form Liz |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Fate indeed and particularly the past is well beyond one's control. Others decisions in your absence as well. But the offer to be there as a friend is priceless. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The rhythm, cadence, meter and rhyming is flawless. You are obviously a poet who makes the effort to produce an excellent product....hats off to you for this |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
If you had only chosen The road on which I stand, You'd never have been frozen In someone else's land I'd be your shield of virtue Beside you, night and day, For I could never hurt you Or throw your love away ================ Mark..... this surely comes from a sensetive caring heart........and surely it would touch many hearts as it touched mine..... Thank you...... ***************************** It's only me.......only me |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Liz, thank you for noticing the technical -- I'm usually pretty perfectionistic and passionate about writing poetry in as tight a form and rhyme as I can... for me, it's not only a challenge but also a satiating reward to be able to express ideas in a symmetrical and aesthetic manner where the technical supports the creative... in other words: I love rhyme! (I still totally appreciate free-form and prose, as well, and may stretch beyond my style, in the near future, just to experience and integrate something different, even more...). RS: thank you for your comments. What truth you speak, for what would our lives truly be like without at least one person to call a friend? Balladeer: a very appreciative thank you for your compliments. As I just told Liz, I gravitate to aesthetic form, symmetry, and euphonous rhyme, especially if it can convey true inspiration in an understandable manner. Thank you for reading. M.E. Melody, you are welcome, but truly: thank YOU for taking a moment to read this poem and share your thoughts with me. As I have mentioned before, Compassion is a virtue that needs to be promulgated in heavy doses in today's world. I believe, in any of my works, that if I can touch but one person in a positive manner, then I have been honored with the reward of real "success". I am very happy to know that you were touched by this. Thank you. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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