Open Poetry #14 |
Let's Fall In Love Again |
ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Living here in separation keeps the heart on tainted sleeves a critical visible situation oh who is this talking to me. Well the years are quickly burning and our love has come to rest and the heartaches that we're earning will see the future past the best. so let's fall in love again let's fall in love like we did back when let's find the same love that made us friends. Well there's grey in your auburn hair and the crows feet mark your eyes but there's beauty there we both shared in the feelings we're trying to hide. let's fall in love again let's fall in love from beginning to end let's make the same love that made us friends. There's everything we need to know in the love we had long ago where we kept our hopes and blessings back when there was no guessing. let's fall in love again the way we did when we were making plans let's find the same love that made us friends. something had to be right back where we found delight let's fall in love again let's use the same love we used back then! Let's fall in love again! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
IM READY..... this is just perfect sweet poet man...all the longing to recapture the feelings that brought you together to begin with...oh yes LETS |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ethome, you are singing your songs again...this is wonderful! To put everything behind you both and look forward to the tomorrows yet to come...this is so very well done...and a Keeper.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes lyrical... and romantic.... Very nicely written Et.. enjoyed this a great deal for many reasons... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula for the comment....I didn't know I was going to get a taker so fast! Lady In White I appreciate the comments and I'm glad for the save...thank you. Cpat Hair I don't know all your reasons but I can guess a lot of them. Thanks for the comment so very much! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is a most excellent song/poem, my friend... Regards, sudhir "I was born intelligent - education ruined me" [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is wonderfully woven. Thoughts held by so very many, I'm certain. If only more would take the time to 'fall in love again' instead of falling out. This is so tender and sensible, though wonderfully romantic. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Eric: I like these 2 stanzas especially: "Living here in separation keeps the heart on tainted sleeves a critical visible situation oh who is this talking to me." "Well there's grey in your auburn hair and the crows feet mark your eyes but there's beauty there we both shared in the feelings we're trying to hide." --very expressive and strong imagery as well as thought-provoking. Hope is never lost as long as one is willing to keep on trying... Nice write. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Sudhir...it is a song poem as many of mine are and I thank you for recognizing that and commenting. Thanks Virginia for the comments and appreciation! You're right more should concentrate on falling back into love! Thank you Mark for the comments and yes, you're right there's always hope for those willing to try! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I was singing as I was reading. This is a wonderful song! Liz |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, I liked the way this reads like a song...so sweet loved this |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Elizabeth I might have to get you to sing it on a CD but I'm sure you can handle that... Sea I thank you for singing along with ET and for the romantic comments! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Sounds like a wonderful idea Ethome, I hope the lucky girl says yes. so let's fall in love again let's fall in love like we did back when let's find the same love that made us friends. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-29-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Good thoughts and rhythm here...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hmmm....should I take a number? Very sweet, and full of longing...and how I do understand! Hugs, me lovie! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ If we get to vote .... This line gets mine ... 'let's make the same love that made us friends' Whoa, baby ... YEAH ! Stuffing the ballot box ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
This poet's life is difficult in this you can believe, it comes to this as a result of wearing heart on sleeve. I hope it works out for you and agree, friends first. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
If only we could go back, but people change in one way or another..sometimes we can only recapture in our minds..nicely done..i really enjoyed ethome.. ~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Lovely thoughts! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
a wonderful topic for a poem/song! everyone should fall in love again....every day. Sometimes we forget excellent writing |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Brian ...thanks ..it's just a song and not happening in my life but I appreciate the thought anyway! Thank you James for the rythumic comment! Serenity I'll give you the # 1 Thanks for reading! Marge........ thank you for the favourite line and the vote! RSWells I thank you for the verse and the comment! Victoria I agree it would be nice if it happened that way...well just maybe it can! Thanks so much! Walker thank you for lovely thoughts! Balladeer thanks for the encouraging comments ....much appreciated!! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well Im finally here...my computer is still making me crazy... but let me ditto all the above about this lil do wa ditty Love this one Eric...melody of words with harmonies of the heart... makes for a perfect love song...and a damn fine poem ...which we have come to know we can expect when seeing your name here... and that makes ya a groovy-poet-pal. *got your email...at least that seems to be working again...I'll write back shortly We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This really did sing to me! I think this would be a lovely 'anniversary' poem/song - to keep love alive is a wonderful idea. Your auburn haired lady is lucky to have you. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Janet for your usual exuberant comments and I hope you can get a hold on that puter and make it see thing your way. I never thought of that Sharon....It's a good idea. I have no Auburn haired lady but I write these things like I do...and sometimes wish I did! Thanks very much! |
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