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Causal Heart |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Who knows whether our hearts were broken We could have investigated the casual relationship between rain storms if we wanted too, lay down by the waters edge and watch the heavens move, but it seems so distant If I knew the exact place my heart stops maybe I could fall effortlessly in love, but it leaves me stranded in a tale of time We painted the mountains with colorful expression and watched autumn fall softly upon the earth in October, Winter was harsh and long with bitter reminders of how cold the world can actually be even in candlelight nights I wanted to sleep naked with you and feel warmth, but felt it inappropriate due to the mood of life so again I lay my head upon the pillow and wept **** Nothing Beautiful In This World Is Ever Really Lost All Things Beloved Live on In Our Hearts...Forever." [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
OMG!  As I said somewhere before.. YOu are getting better.. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
LOL! DUH! Sorry..I mean..its not like you already weren't exceptional, but you amaze me every time you post. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lauren, Such a lovely poem to contain so much sadness, my friend. Take care and (((hugs))) to you. Michael Proust- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lauren....you pass the feel along with your words.... that is a poet, indeed.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
lay down by the waters edge and watch the heavens move, but it seems so distant =============================== watched autumn fall softly upon the earth in October, Winter was harsh and long with bitter reminders of how cold the world can actually be even in candlelight nights I wanted to sleep naked with you and feel warmth, but felt it inappropriate due to the mood of life so again I lay my head upon the pillow and wept ================================ I read most of the poetry twice... first aloud...to hear flow, cadence, etc .. then again to silently to absorb fully,to inhale... I cant make it past the line of "watched autumn fall" with out breaking down... your words and the things in me they stir, effect me this way... and I love when poetry touches me like this it will be a while before I will be able to finish this one outloud... but never doubt I have inhaled every word and made them my own. thank you for that  jmWe wish ourselves beautiful, |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Hopefully this is an eye opener, I read this twice, still felt it's impact. WOW |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Ok I am present here for you...lolo But it is really very Excellent...very nice way to express your sadness |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed the thoughts here...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
nice clear fresh images !!!  Kathleen Blake |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Temptress, What a compliment you give...it means so much...thank you...  Michael, Thank you for your support to my words always... Sunshine, from one poet to another, thank you kindly... Janet Marie, I am so touched by your words and how they affect me....I too inhale all you say...thank you dear friend... latin passion, i am so glad this affected you...thanks for reading... Waseem Cheema, thanks so much....hugs to you... JamesMichael, thanks always for your thpughts...greatly appreciated... Irish Rose, Thanks my friend... Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is absolutely nothing worse than being alone when you are with someone, and did you ever get this point across, great work. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
lovely words Lauren...glad to be back again...missed everyone..hugs..lovely pic too ~Victoria~
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren--Your feelings of sadness and longing are so beauifully expressed here. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
I understand the feeling of being alone even when you aren't alone. Sometimes I believe I have lived my whole life this way even though I am very loved. Great write Sauni Sauni :) |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Mysteria~ I agree, and the point was never taken...  thanks for reading and responding...hugs to you...Victoria~ Thanks for you thoughtful words...really is so good to see ya...hugs to you... Martie~ thank you for taking time to read, I appreciate that much... hugs to you... Saunni~ I agree with you....most of life has been the same for me... thanks my friend for reading...***** Nothing Beautiful In This World Is Ever Really Lost All Things Beloved Live on In Our Hearts...Forever." [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So much sadness and longing, written so very beautifully. If I knew the exact place my heart stops maybe I could fall effortlessly in love, but it leaves me stranded in a tale of time I can only add - amen! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I echo JanetMarie's sentiments here, I felt this one somehow, and left me kind of sad. But glad I read it. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Greeneye's, a sad and lovely discriptive write. It was a joy to read. Parker |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you pull so much emotion and feeling from your words. . . I'm always amazed Lauren. . . this is no exception. . . you've conveyed them here very well. . . I can see it. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow...I am so thrilled that you all read and felt these words...I appreciate you all so much...THANKS... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World Is Ever Really Lost All Things Beloved Live on In Our Hearts...Forever." [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
"The mood of life" sometimes makes us do or not do things that we later regret. Loved it, this one really touched my heart. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Oh dear Lady you do know how so I can relate to this one. Dear Lord Lc, this just touches me so much and each time I get the privelage to read one of your poems I can't help but think how you have grown so much into this beautiful poetess who just reaches right out and touches our hearts so much with such exquisite writings. Hugs to you, luv you lady. Donna On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Walker~ Gentle Spirit~ thanks for stopping by to read....and for your kind comments... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
precious,i wanted to lay naked with you, thatis so inocent and the follow words are so wise, lovely poem Kindly, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
redheart angrybraids Thank you so much for stopping by to read, so glad you enjoyed.... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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