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The Catch
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The Catch |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Catch A string of words I’ll make caught in the gills and dangling silver streaked with wiggle gone beneath a sunburned face and hair streaked with relaxation of barefooted fisher he Behind him the falling cottonwood blossoms cover the dirt and fill the air with dreamy dare of unicorns and innocence falling into summer The sun captures the still mountain moving through time layered with naked history striations of beginnings and the burnt orange sulfa of ends I caught something here today fisher I the same as another time where there were glass eyed buildings and a city torched with sunrise Do you see it with your fresh eye and this minutes captured view It is me |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah...Brava! This is marvelous...the Pen is back! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I can say only... WOW!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You cute little fishergirl you ! ! 'A string of words I’ll make caught in the gills and dangling silver streaked with wiggle gone' Wiggle gone ... NOT ... wiggled into my heart with a smile, ya did !  LOVE - HUGS - n' other fancy stuff~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Good catch! What beautiful imagery. Masterfullly woven indeed. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful. . . nothing like catching some fine words from such a wonderful poet. . . I liked the image that you used here. . . very different!!!  --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
Wow1 I loved the image! I liked how u described the fish w/out actually saying it is a fish! ^_^ Really nice! --Artistic-- "Dreams are the touchstones of our characters" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- i'm loving this one! wonderful!!  hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, Superb, my friend How could it be any other way THis is a great one Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady--thank you for the marvelous...as for the pen, a day at a time. Cpat--Wow, is a wonderful thing to say! Marge--If I wiggled a smile from you then I caught a big one. Interloper--Thank you for saying such nice things. Sven--Nice to see you...thanks so much for stopping by and for your sweet reply. Artistic--yup, well it was a fish...but I had to make it into words cause I had no film in my camera...thanks. Vicky--Lovely to see you! Hi Liz--I have missed seeing you..thanks for stopping by. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and hair streaked with relaxation ================== Behind him the falling cottonwood blossoms cover the dirt and fill the air with dreamy dare ==================== The sun captures the still mountain moving through time layered with naked history striations of beginnings and the burnt orange sulfa of ends I caught something here today fisher I the same as another time where there were glass eyed buildings and a city torched with sunrise Do you see it with your fresh eye and this minutes captured view It is me ====================== and the view is awesome. As I read your poetry, I realize Im holding my breath..at the same time inhaling the images while hanging on every word and I know when I get to the end.. to the poetic sweet intend...I'll be able to breath again... but theres a catch to that... I never want the poem to end. yes...THE PEN is back.  meI'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"The sun captures the still mountain moving through time layered with naked history striations of beginnings and the burnt orange sulfa of ends" Ah Martie....only you can write such beauty! The whole poem is marvelous my dear flower girl! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Martie, you just wiggled into my heart with this one, and your trip sounds awesome. A bit of sunburn, a lot of rippling water makes for a wonderful day, and I can't wait to READ the pictures! Excellent, and I am sure glad you are back, I missed you and your words. "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Martie! Great imagery. I love the way you wove this poem together. |
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