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Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-06-27 09:59 AM

Twilight Time

what is to be said
then, about
twilight’s advancing years

certainly, when with
the right love
there is nothing come to fear

who is to say to one
that the best
is yet to come?

so look forward then
with delight,
as twilight becomes our when…

this shall be the time
when all love
erupts in sheer glory

now, sit here and pen
with me
all the rest of our story

and we shall leave in
our pasts
all miseries and despair behind

take up our scars
the never lost dreams
and with our love then, combine

so my sweet
never feel
lost, and all alone

as you, my love
are in my heart,
and in our twilight, home

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-06-27 10:04 AM

i think the last verse says it all... a beautiful piece and one I am sure will be appreciated by the one it was written for.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-06-27 10:16 AM

gentle and beautiful

very nice

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-06-27 10:21 AM

in my heart and mind
twilight becomes eternal
with you in my arms
~*~
Wow, you DID inspire me with this one, Lady

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-06-27 11:07 AM

now, sit here and pen
with me
all the rest of our story

Every element of this piece is marvelous, but the wonderful originality of phrase in this stanza stands out, for me, more than all the others.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

5 posted 2001-06-27 01:18 PM

That everyone could have twilight years such as you describe... lovely

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2001-06-27 05:15 PM

This is just how it should be. Beautiful thoughts, in a lovely, flowing poem.
Sandra

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-06-27 10:33 PM

Oh do I ever love this one...it flowed like honey, and being in those "twilight years", I was listening. Beautiful!

"Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself."
~ Hopi ~

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