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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Holding Hands The air was fresh and sunlit, as it swirled around the Douglas fir. It whipped the towels draped on the railing of the wooden deck. From where I stood looking at the lake, it caught me and undid my hair. I had heard the quarreling voices, each tinged with placing blame on the other’s stooped shoulders. I took the path away. Time had drained the strength needed to keep the cabin of summer, with the lovely little outhouse on the hill. There is no blame to the edge that time softens. He had built it all. On his hands I could see the plan, callused and gnarled. She had softened it with her aproned arms. Many nights they lay beyond the screen, looking at the last ember’s glow of fire, listening to the frog voices echo down the mountain into the cove. Were they holding hands then, in the dark with their youth still visible? The wind carried his words to me "I’m sorry", turned me to look back. As she touched his cheek and smiled, I could see that they were holding hands now. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
yes, yes, I like, I like.... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
A happy ending...thank you for that! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Time had drained the strength needed =========================== There is no blame to the edge that time softens. He had built it all. On his hands I could see the plan, callused and gnarled. She had softened it with her aproned arms. Many nights they lay beyond the screen, looking at the last ember’s glow of fire, listening to the frog voices echo down the mountain into the cove. Were they holding hands then, in the dark with their youth still visible? The wind carried his words to me "I’m sorry", turned me to look back. As she touched his cheek and smiled, I could see that they were holding hands now. ================= I knew I was going to love this just from the title alone ... this is written with such a cool and compassionate perspective Martie-girl. It reminded me of the summers landscaping where the wind did indeed carry conversations across subdivision lakes and common ground.. and I use to wonder what the people looked like by their voices. OH--if the geraniums could talk, the things they could tell  LOLWe wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is exquisite in it's imagery and simplicity, just a lovely verse, written in fine form and presented most excellently! Kathleen Blake |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The simplest of gestures becomes an exquisite piece of writing when Marties mind gets ahold of it. You do reveal so much about a person in your woven thoughts. Excellent, Martie Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ This ... 'There is no blame to the edge that time softens.' ... landed smack-dab in the middle of my heart ! Such a very touching piece. *Hugs* to you, sweet sister of my heart.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I came back for a visit....please, teach me how you do this.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my! Were there ever two words that could communicate more than, "I'm sorry"? Your words are woven into my heart with this one Martie. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
nice story telling, Martie S Arthur |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I thank you twice.  JLR--A bitter sweet ending...some times it is so hard to let go. Janet--I call them my mother and father-in-love...they are so dear to me. This was a heart breaking time for them, and for me. Kathleen--what a lovely thing to say...thank you. Liz--your replies always please me, my friend. Marge--For my words to land in my heart makes me smile...thanks sis. Sharon--just two words and sometimes so hard to say...thank you for understanding. S.Arthur--Thank you so much for stopping to read and for your nice comment. It is appreciated. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*SIGH* So much in this. I love it. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Absolutely beautiful writing! It engulfed me completely! Such pure images like a refreshing cool breeze they flowed through my mind opening doors into the world of virtual perspective! "There is no blame to the edge that time softens." Such a wonderful creative writing line. Keep up the good work flower girl! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Martie...the imagery in your poetry is timeless |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, This is pretty. I've always wanted a cabin. One day I plan to build one in the deep woods of N.C. with a big fireplace and enjoy the deep snows of that area. Michael Proust- |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good, Martie. Told with tenderness and love. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, Martie... completely and unequivocally. With your usual superb imagery you've captured some of those illusive qualities that make relationships last for decades instead of moments... the realization that love is still there no matter what the frustrations, the ability and determination to work through hard times, the willingness to accept blame when it's deserved, and the compassion to forgive and go on. Beautiful! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
the other day, I was thinking of you and your writing and wondering what of yours I have missed in my absense...glad I didn't miss this one, and yeppers, I think I am gonna do a search of yours and copy them all to disk so I can read at home, when I have more time.....love your writing lady, exceptional as always |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
very enjoyable  |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Lovely, tender images, Martie. You do paint vividly scenes and emotions. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- I'm so glad I decided to go back and dig up some of the poems that have slipped by me. This one makes it all worthwhile. Very touching write.. hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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