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Windy Candle II
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Windy Candle II |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Candle flame flickers, Wind slips under the window, Then smoke and darkness. Moonlight casts steady shadow And starlight gently twinkles. Cold fingers searches, Placing flame back to the wick, Returns the flicker. Clouds obscure passing so quick Riding where wind reaches. Gloom |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Enjoying this very much.... |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Decaflame I am please you are, With just a few lines added I have a sonnet Windy Candle III Candle flame flickers, Wind slips under the window, Then smoke and darkness. Moonlight casts steady shadow And starlight gently twinkles. Eyes watching Seeing the sleepy movements Sky and wind, Heavens and the firmament. Cold fingers searches, Placing flame back to the wick, Returns the flicker. Clouds obscure passing so quick Riding where wind reaches. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PG~ And lovelier yet ... the flame ~ Tender movement within your phrasing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Haven't I read the other part to this somewhere? I'm confused I think, but I still love this!  you write so beautifully. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Capitally done. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Marge, I am pleased that you liked this. Thank you, Temptress Occasionally I write via expansion This is one of those poems: Originally two Haiku’s (in I) Then each Haiku becomes a Senryu With two lines added (in II) Then becomes a sonnet with four more added (in III). (using the definition of a sonnet as 14 stylized lines) I am glad you enjoyed. Thank you, Poeminister, I appreciate the appreciation. Gloom |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am learning so much from you here and at your home page. I have learned now, I sure don't know how to write poetry, but I still love whatever it is that I am doing. Maybe one day (when I grow up), I will write one I can be as proud of as any given one of yours! Fantastic as usual. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
*return the flicker* I like the sound of that PG..*s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
lovely jusy lovely,enjoyed it so much |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Professor I enjoyed this one very much.......Sue Suetang |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Mysteria, I honored by your kind words, If at my site I might recommend my “Cell Series”. Thank you, nakdthoughts, I am please you could find a bit of my words to please you, Thank you, Watersigh6, I am glad I could give you a touch of enjoyment With my meager words. Thank you, Sue, your are very kind, glad you enjo my words Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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