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Twilight's Fugue
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Twilight's Fugue |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Twilight's Fugue Deep quiet born of twilight's fugue Perched entranced upon the night, I care not what I have to lose To gain this moments happenstance, Mercury tossed on widow's weeds Flowing tears upon those folds, Diurnal sands spent fruitlessly To come at last unto a close, My shadow on a faultless moon A breath of soul from cinnabar, Relinquished now to touchstones lode The heady scent of narcissi, And when I rise again fulfilled To pour myself into that sea, My pleasure and my penitence To wait in vain for twilight's fugue. Olias. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To come at last unto a close, My shadow on a faultless moon A breath of soul from cinnabar, Relinquished now to touchstones lode The heady scent of narcissi, And when I rise again fulfilled To pour myself into that sea, My pleasure and my penitence To wait in vain for twilight's fugue. ======================= Olias...this is fabulous...the imagery..the unique vocabulary and as always my fave thing about your writing is your wonderful touch of melodic cadence... very cool write...well done poet of lyric and verse  I'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
there is no pleasure that state of forgetfulness nor penitence the sea, a place of rebirth revealed in your history Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I'll have to let this one gestate for a while... Very nice vocabulary and imagery that implies many more meanings than at first appear... a somber, pensive tone; yet, much more... A very nice word-painting. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OLIAS~ This is soooooooooo lovely~ 'My shadow on a faultless moon A breath of soul from cinnabar' What a breathtaking image these lines hold. Wonderfully presented phrasing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
I care not what I have to lose...a breath of soul from cinnabar. At the risk of gushing, I loved this! |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
J.M. Your words make me blush, thank you for your kind encouragement poet friend. Interloper, Your very wise thank you for your verse and your response. Mark V Sheldon, Thank you sir, and your very perceptive. Marge, Your too kind, your words humble me, thank you. JLR, I'm glad you enjoyed, it means so much to be appreciated. Regards and best wishes to all, Olias. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a delight, Olias... but I found I couldn't read it quickly... I had to savor the images... and that was time well spent. *S* Great work! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah ... such a wonderful combination of image and thought... a pleasure to read.. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Olias: Such a great vocabulary within a captive atmosphere! Great writing!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Magical, Olias |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Suthern, Cpat Hair, Ethome, Brian Madden, My deepest appologies for taking so long to Thank you for your kind responses, they mean so much to me, I have been A.W.O.L. from passions and deserve court martial. Regards to you all, and thanks once again, Olias. |
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