Open Poetry #14 |
Down Too Long |
Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Down Too Long By: Noah Eaton 6/22/01 I’ve been down too long I can’t seem to sing a song Please don’t leave my heart bleeding in my lap I’ve been down so long Abandoned like a lost kitten Crying for someone’s loving comfort Feeling so lovelorn in a world so small to me In all this time I feel so insecure Night swimming in an ocean of broken hearts Losing myself in sorrow No raft to hold on tightly to No sight of seagulls to lead me to the coast My tired body freezing and aching Skin stinging with hypothermia My heart is so cold, my lungs are shivering I am struggling to swim, with this emptiness flooding my nervous system Half-a-mind crying, half-a-mind hurting A heart crying to see someone reaching a hand out to save me Tidal waves slowly pushing me closer Choking and hallucinating ever so much, dreaming of resting in peace I’ve been down too long, everything feels so cold Smiles shipwrecked in pirouetting hurricanes, rotating in my mind All that’s left is me Struggling to feel alive… |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Mistletoe Angel, you make me cold as I "see" the picture you have painted with your words. So lonesome a picture. How can we help get you to shore? Sending warmth to chase away the blue's. ME |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Loneliness and dispair seem to echo throught each line in a haunting rhythm. No matter how bad it seems for you, there is always hope. Never forget that, Angel. (((hugs))) All writing comes |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Noah, I have been there, and it is so very cold. Not knowing if this is personal, or just a very good portrayal of lonliness, but if it is you feeling so down, please hold on, here is my hand. Take care Sandra |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Noah, I pray that is not how you are feeling. You have expressed the pain and lonliness of losing some one sooo well. I have been there as well..as I'm sure we all have. Look around you.. your friends who love you are reaching out with both hands. Grab one and hold on tight.. being alone only worsens the pain. ~hugs~ to you Noah. TaraB [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 06-22-2001).] |
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