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The Pouring Rain
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The Pouring Rain |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Clouds go by as I look to the sky Freezes me in the in-between Busy with life’s comings and goings Not pausing to see Not ever wondering why Time still remains for all just the same Can’t forget the last dream In which I had my peace of mind Don’t know what a day like today means Suddenly I remember her name And it starts pouring rain Everyone should sometimes come undone And let that feeling flow through The most peaceful time of day What wonders solitude can do Just letting the raindrops come I have no shame watching the rain Nothing will ever satisfy me The way I am with opened mind A spirit finally set free Suddenly I forget her name And it keeps pouring rain |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
every line likes me, followed me into the calm of myself, to the home which I would prefer.... so I shall tuck this into the library, for further viewing, when I need just this.... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Everyone should sometimes come undone...well, at least I'm doing that right. Enjoyed much! |
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Rain Junior Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 21Atlanta, GA |
The same line captured me as JLR: Everyone should come undone. My compliments. This was excellent. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
truly beautiful  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Everyone should sometimes come undone And let that feeling flow through The most peaceful time of day What wonders solitude can do Just letting the raindrops come I have no shame watching the rain Nothing will ever satisfy me The way I am with opened mind A spirit finally set free Suddenly I forget her name And it keeps pouring rain =========================== your ability to write these kinds of emotions so that the reader feels the intensity is always impressive, and as Lady says your then take the reader to that place inside of them that relates to your words. this is a beauty PK. We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
PK...these lines haunt me... "Can’t forget the last dream In which I had my peace of mind" another powerful piece from you...helen |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Love the feel of this, PK. Excellent work! I've been in this place and you have portrayed it well. S Arthur |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I think it's beautiful, thanks Titia |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Well done, enjoyed! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
nothing like the rain to wash away the memory of one long gone. . . you know that I like this PK. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I've been "undone" it's not all it's cracked up to be!!!!! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is really beautiful! Thanks for sharing Sauni Sauni :) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice poem It is raining here at atantla smiles |
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