Open Poetry #14 |
Paradise Is A Lonely Place |
KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
A crystaline tear trickles down, mixing with the saltiness of the beautiful blue Pacific lapping gently at my feet. Staring at the horizon I watch for distant sails making their way to hidden oasis....... Where are you? Am I ever going to discover your sweet lips, the way you smile at me, the longing in your eyes, talking with you about everything and nothing at all for hours, making love until dawn glows brightly in our eyes I thought I saw you.... The man who perfectly matches me, who loves me solely for who I am, who can appreciate how very much I want to please him and be beside him. But I just haven't found you yet. Where are you my love? Tears slide silently from emerald eyes obliterating the beauty of the day. My grievous wounds are just too great to watch other lovers enraptured in the joys of paradise..... Paradise is a lonely place... And time is running out as I wait and watch the horizon for that one distant sail...... Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
The beauty of this comes through the sadness, and I feel the course of that crystalline tear.... thank you for sharing this.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When it seems the whole world walks two by two, aloneness is magnified. You've written a poem of beauty and sadness... well done! |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Koko, May you find your bird of Paradise, and may he be brilliant! And may your paradise be beautiful again! ~Sheri |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I like this.....brilliant writing!! Nathan |
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DYME Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 104Texas |
I FELT THAT ONE. NO WEAPON FORMED AGAINST ME SHALL PROSPER... ISAIAH 54:17 |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Koko this is silky soft...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
the perfect setting...paradise Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent, a superb setting. . . definitely not one for such sadness. . . you show the feelings very well here. . . I like it. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Excellent writing Koko. How about we girls go on a tropical shopping spree? "I am not now that which I have been." |
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