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VAS
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0 posted 2001-06-21 08:12 PM


Keeping it Short
Virginia Salter

I’ve got to keep it short
like other ones of sport
but when I keep it short
it seems like a retort.

It’s as if, in making essay,
when I have much to say
to clip it would delay
what I’d attempt convey.

Yet others of great talent
to verbiage they don’t relent
so why am I so malcontent
when fewer words I’ve spent?

does this make any sense?

© June 21, 2001

© Copyright 2001 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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TEXAS (it's all big)
1 posted 2001-06-21 08:17 PM


I do understand VAS and I am trying to do better yuh I think it is just burnout.
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2001-06-22 11:35 PM


Yes...I understand. Very nicely done Virginia.  
vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2001-06-23 05:59 AM


VAS-
   yep...makes sense to me..
   nice write..

   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2001-06-23 07:01 AM


~smiling..you always have something unique to say..I enjoyed

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-06-23 09:12 AM


Ah Virginia...I do so enjoy seeing your wit amuse us! This is delightful! It IS a challenge seeing how much we can say, in seventeen syllables or less....

brevity in form
keeps us in good stead and norm
Difficult? oh My!

The meek
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since 2001-06-22
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6 posted 2001-06-23 09:18 AM


So true, how hard it is to put forward ones feeling in such a short amount of words. I have had trouble with tha a lot. Great read...

We must read the lines before we read between the lines.

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
7 posted 2001-06-23 10:42 AM


Thanks all for reading.  I've just proven a point here, though.  You read this one, that at least upon the first read today was farther down the board than one I posted last night that's only been read by one, well commented on by two or three.  "Vanity's Play" seems longer, well, it probably is, but it's more interesting than this one, I think.  Of course it surprised its readers, greatly, so maybe you read it and just didn't know what to say.  

Anyway, shorter, in poetry, wins out, usually.  Well okay, maybe it matters most if the poet is expected to have something to say.  

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