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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There is nothing I could do there is not a thing I'd choose no one I would rather be-- I want you to want me--for ME. I wish we could wish us alone. Sand angels--I am on my own. No impression made too deep. each grain to fall, memory's keep. In the beauty of a glass, how we wish for time to pass! As we watch our lives in spill-- then wish that we had time to kill. Each thought of you, a castle spilt-- every wave, in pave of silt. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
each grain to fall, memory's keep ..... Extraordinary.... Regards O Serene One, Sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
No impression made too deep. each grain to fall, memory's keep. In the beauty of a glass, how we wish for time to pass! As we watch our lives in spill-- then wish that we had time to kill. Each thought of you, a castle spilt-- every wave, in pave of silt. ================================= what you do with metaphor, rhyme and the emotions of your heart and soul never cease to blow me away... No wonder me muse splits...  We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
"In the beauty of a glass, how we wish for time to pass!" This a great line. I am new here but just wanted to say I enjoyed this greatly. Until you are are near it, you will never see it, until you live it you will never know it...this is why we must not judge it. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
In the beauty of a glass, how we wish for time to pass! As we watch our lives in spill-- then wish that we had time to kill. Each thought of you, a castle spilt-- every wave, in pave of silt. ============================= You never fail to Amaze. "across the unfair divide |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Ok, I really liked this, I mean really!" Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes. . . written in the sands of life and love. . . wonderful serenity. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I just had to read this again, I really liked this so much |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Awww, I really liked this also. I enjoyed this one! Sauni Sauni :) |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Angel, most definitely, but methinks that if you are a sand angel, then I shall certainly miss your company with each high tide that sweeps along the sandy shores, and truly shall wait upon the rocks as the moon pulls its unceasing tricks to hear your angelic voice. You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very interesting approach Celeste....... " I wish we could wish us alone. Sand angels--I am on my own." There's a lot of passion in this loneliness....well done! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*sigh* |
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