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Strawberry Fields |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Strawberry Fields If you don't like me get lost. If you don't care for me don't even stop to count the cost. If my presence is not required and this is all in vain don't waste anymore of my time it will only delay the pain. Kiss me my final goodbye because I already know it doesn't hurt for long to cry. Take one last look and if your eyeballs are not fulfilled why waste anymore time together. Looks like this one won't be strawberry field's forever. Most likely strawberry field's of displeasure. Jameslee@June20,2001 |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely said... enjoyed the word play and the ending..a bit of a different twist.. good work... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
James, I have a pot of strawberrys. Enjoyed |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, my, if only we could speak so powerfully and succinctly when faced with the type of things that would prompt such a response. This is extremely well done and I enjoyed the read greatly!!! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Well, that's certainly putting it on the table...enjoyed! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
James you've got the honesty heart out and writing today....I thought this was very forceful. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...a great display of strength in pain...very difficult to achieve in feelings, not to mention words...very nice |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
No chocolate in this strawberries, well said! |
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