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Kiss Me Again----with Poemcrazy
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Kiss Me Again----with Poemcrazy |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
she takes him by the hand listen, she whispers the stars are singing she's electricity without the shock, not static, just something...else. it's not cold but he's shivering, his eyes say "you make my knees weak." in desperation, he seeks her lips, and the stars get brighter. she returns his kiss showing him the music pulling it down from the skies and moving from her lips to his knees double and they tumble to dew drenched grass he doesn't want to breathe, just kiss, one more, like this. the stars are just echoes of the music he hears, he touches her everywhere, with everything. she sighs into open eyes and says "make us one" with trembling hands he touches her face running his thumb over lips kissed swollen slipping down her throat pausing to feel her heartbeat against his palm questions answered when he looks in her eyes all the yesses he tugs her shirt ,revealing moon bathed skin... a pause, and she sees him say "you're so beautiful" with a stare. and he dares... she smiles, bathed in moonlight and kisses, "kiss me here" "YES" "again" "YES" "again" and he does.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the stars are just echoes of the music he hears, he touches her everywhere, with everything. she sighs into open eyes and says "make us one" ========================= this is beautiful you two.... romantic and sensual. the employ of imagery and comparisons of the stars made it very cool. "the stars are singing she's electricity without the shock, not static, just something...else." well done...you two write very well together  she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...the beauty of this comes from your imagery... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and he does". Really like this...James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula sweetest sister of my heart, and Poemcrazy, this is fabulous, absolutely fabulous. YOU are both talented, Paula I can't tell where the join is, the two of you write wonderfully together. I love this, I really do, just sooooooo good. The imagery and the way this is written it just screams quality. Utterly utterly beautiful   love as always Mushy   Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
Yhis is just splendid...and he does....YES!!!! |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
S...two...pendous! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
quote this forevermore. nice write o yuh give it that guy you want. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JM...he is just a joy to write with...thanks Fancy...sometimes its the image that makes the poem...thanks James...Im glad you like it sweet friend Marsha...lol well he is a great partner...if I could JUST get him to accept his part in these hehehe forevernbluejeans...thanks lol YES!!! JLR...well it takes two to feel this...thanks sugar Walt...oh he knows...lol he knows |
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