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Siren
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa 
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Siren Thee I love, I will pluck thee from pitching decks awash, drag thee flailing into my arms my raptures enfold thee, embrace thee, taste thy blue tongued swelling exaltations, For I will grant thee wings to fly, deep into me, Feel my coral fingers rake thy sodden bone, hear the sweet voice of thine oblivion, Let my flotsam legs entwine thee, salting thy mouth with gurgling ecstasy 'til sated, Then sleep in my arms beloved, Revelations will not tear thee from me. Olias. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this I liked Olias, a good use of the language. . . flowing very well. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thank you for your response kind poet sir it is greatly appreciated, I'm not too sure about the form but the content I would like to develope further at a later date. Regards and best wishes, Olias. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey Olias... this is way cool use of vocabulary and imagery... youve used many unique words and phrases here... I saw where you said you were thinking about further developing this... this could be taken on into a sonnet me thinks..(or not) LOL great writing poet sir..good to see your name here too  she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Truly enjoyed the entire poem...that last line really got me. Your writing humbles me. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Excellent write, Olias...I truly enjoyed your vocab choices, as well! Great work... sp  I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
J.M. Hi there, Thank you for your kind words, I thought about a sonnet to begin with, it is a distinct possibility, great minds... (lol) take care poet friend. JLR, Your response humbles me, kind poet and I'm happy you enjoyed Thank you. Snowpants, Its very kind of you to take the time to read and respond its much appreciated, best wishes. Regards to all Olias |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Almost makes drowning seem like a good thing. Well done, indeed. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
And the images..as well as the words are devoured with eager anticipation.... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a great use of language here....very well done! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A timeless poem of a timeless emotion told in a timeless fashion. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Interloper, Thanks for dropping by and your kind words. Cpat Hair, I'm glad you liked, your response is much appreciated. Ethome, So glad you enjoyed, thank you very much. Brian Madden, Your words honour me poet sir, Thank you. Kindest regards to all and best wishes, Olias. |
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