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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-06-19 02:39 PM

How short
The long-lived word
Does live in this Domain
It’s very soul
Flies like a bird
To places it will remain
To lie in
Dusty solitude
Perhaps be read again
But most will die
In digital bites
Locked in archive’s chain

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-06-19 02:44 PM

Well then, let us traipse through the archives and breath life into WORDS once again!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-06-19 02:47 PM

what a great treasure
the archives wherein we find
words you penned ... we read

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-06-19 03:25 PM

I spend most of my evenings in the archives, as this is where the greatest treasures are kept safe. Nicely done.

~*~ Tell someone you love them today, as tomorrow may never come ~*~

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

4 posted 2001-06-19 03:39 PM

rich words here never die
they are in great supply
tucked away safe in our archives ally
to be read again by you and i

enjoyed your work as always...helen

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

5 posted 2001-06-19 03:42 PM

Yep, the poems wiz by. The best we can hope for is to print them out, save them and read for later.

With our own work, hopefull we stop to print them out, save them for that body of work we'll all someday do.

Well said.

Corinne

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-06-19 03:58 PM

so very well-written with a touch of melancholy for that which passes this way and that

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

7 posted 2001-06-19 04:04 PM

Ok I hope you don't mind me pointing this out,

"The long-lived word
Does live in this Domain"

In a short poem as this and especially in lines following each other the word "live" is over used. It would add a little extra flavour if you changed the second "live" to something like breath or something else.

Other than this tiny thing, a great poem. enjoyed this alot and reminds me that I should look through my own library at some stage.

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-06-19 04:13 PM

Good point Brian..

This one just popped into my head and I didn't really edit it as I should have, and was posted on an impulse...to comment on the way this and all boards change content so quickly, and that such good works pass the eyes of this reader that I thought it a shame very few would be read again or at least shared across as broad an audience as they deserve.

I too dislike overused words... and appreciate your pointing it out...

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