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Walls from Time
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Walls from Time |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Stones piled one On one Stacked in careful Order No mortar holds In place This wall built so Long ago It is the weight Of each Stone and stone Atop That keeps one from Falling |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Frost would disagree....but I like yours better. Very well done. Bob |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sounds like a good foundation to me.... |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I love stone walls.... where I live if you drive just a ways out of the city there are parts of stone walls still standing from days gone by... made of our native stones Beautiful Thanks Connie |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Perfectly said, truthfully rendered. I'm sure there's a perfect metaphor here if I could think of the kind of 'mortar' that holds people with similar problems together, binding them into a common strength. Aha! Perhaps I've just done it. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent work, indeed... regards, sudhir "I was born intelligent - education ruined me" |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Simply stated and enjoyed. ~A~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
The very basis of the stone walls in Ireland. Enjoyed the deeper meaning, too. Well done, as usual. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i know these walls but... they are ones i've built around me they keep me safe only one problem it has no gate helen |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
RMW... frost would be the master and I am just a hack. Thanks for the good words. Sunshine... a foundation or a prison could be anything couldn't it? Zinsser... I too love stone walls and am glad you enjoyed. VAS... You;ll think of that metaphor...I have no doubt. Thanks for the comment Sudhir Iyer...Thank you. You are far too kind Alicethruglass .. Thank You Interloper ... Thanks for the comment and thanks for looking below the surface 1slick_lady ... You get the booby prize... it is the same stones which we use to protect ourselves that also deny us the ability to get out. The weight of all those stones hold each other in place... Thanks very much for the comment... it is always nice to see someone relate to your words the same way you felt when you wrote them [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 06-19-2001).] |
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