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RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

0 posted 2001-06-19 09:24 AM

The Outer Bank

I do not mind this narrow shelf
Between the shore and open sea.
Nor do I find your placing me
Upon your outer bank of self
Where fog lifts slowly,
A cold rebuff to intimacy. Alone
I've seen your summer shift,
The sheer and fetching drift of mood,
The fullness of your solitude.

RMW

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-06-19 09:25 AM

I do not have words RL... but this is by far among your best and all are wonderful

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-06-19 09:29 AM

touching my heart.....
wow! Such a beautiful picture you've painted for me!

Love this

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-06-19 09:32 AM

Thanks Sea and ...and...???....Cpat?...what is that by the way? Is that supposed to be Capt? Smiling. Post! I'm running out of steam out here on the floor by myself. And the .....shhhhhh.....principal is coming....!!!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-06-19 09:37 AM

Principal has arrived...LOL....

with a gold star!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2001-06-19 02:20 PM

This is indeed one of your very best. An understanding and giving of space even when it hurts.
well writ my friend.

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

6 posted 2001-06-19 03:38 PM

Beautiful write.

Cor

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-06-19 04:02 PM

Well
RL
one cannot tell
the steam be any less
for when you pen
with byte and yen
you fill our eyes with bless

our hearts take in
the words you spin
as soothe sinks deep inside
to read your lovely thoughts my friend
right here we'll glad abide

[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 06-20-2001).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-06-20 12:13 PM

I've seen your summer shift,
The sheer and fetching drift of mood,
The fullness of your solitude.
======================

this is wonderful...
the level of imagery and emote in such succinctity is quite impressive...
very well done.. great rhyme flow as well.

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2001-06-20 12:38 PM

Excellent...I'll email you.

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

lunatic
Member

since 2001-04-20

Posts 172

10 posted 2001-06-21 03:49 PM

Insightful and well written.

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

11 posted 2001-06-21 06:43 PM

Thank you everyone. I kinda like this one too. Hope to soon have a little more time to read and comment. Bob

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