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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
rubber banding not much more than a stretch of the gum a rubber banding that has just begun that taut feel of tension so tight that bounding moment of things not gone right that rubber banding and I await the snap! don’t rubber band me it’s worse than a whap… I didn’t grow to argue you know I didn’t listen to a fight or two I abhor the thought and more of this, and I can’t take that much from you this stretching of a rubber band this solid commitment of command this military right! no wrong not for the weak, or the trying…. only the strong… can’t you see this trying to be? can’t you see the weak on their knees? can’t you feel the care that was there? is it all you? was I ever there? snap! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
what a powerful, fantastically crafted metaphor!!! KAPOW! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DecaFlame~ 'was I ever there?' Skipping lightly over some memory stones here. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Control is a powerful thing, and your poem is indicitive of how one get's lost in control, great job on this poem, that I am sure many, many can relate to Decaflame. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Wow! This is really impressive. Will have to look around for more of yours. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Ouch ... Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Decaflame, This is a very powerful piece. Rubber banding...it does feel like that, doesn't it? In my opinion, this is one of the best poems of yours I've read. Excellent, my friend. Michael Proust- |
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mistyrose Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 75state of anxiety |
decaflame what a great job you did with this so glad i stopped in to have the chance to see it rubberbanding....wow mistyrose~* |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
I do thank you all for stopping by to read.... and for your varied comments! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
you know I am reminded of what I have read of Taoism. A simple philosophy that is often hard to follow but it does have valid points. Sometimes you lead Sometimes you follow Sometimes you are stifled Sometimes you breathe easy Sometimes you are strong Sometimes you are weak If you understand others you are smart. If you understand yourself you are illuminated. If you overcome others you are powerful. If you overcome yourself you have strength. If you know how to be satisfied you are rich. If you can act with vigor, you have a will. If you don't lose your objectives you can be long-lasting I guess basically what it comes down to is that you don't have to be the rubber band because from your words I see you more as the golden ribbon dancing in the wind. I know that all this TAO stuff is easier said than done. I guess I am ranting but what I mean to say is take care and keep writing powerful poetry. "across the unfair divide |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sharply expressed. Nicely done. Poeminister |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Decaflame....well done. Bob PS I apologize for the temporary justaposition with my recent post. Purely coincidental and quickly be corrected as mine recedes. Bob |
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Morgoth Junior Member
since 2001-05-21
Posts 26Baltimore, MD |
I felt the snap from over here. Keep it up, and I will keep reading... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is superb, Decaflame... powerful and painful! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Powerful... Extremely well written work... Regards, Sudhir |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this one deserves many cheers and  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Captured the conflicting viewpoints of a struggle not wished for and not wanted... lonely feelings to be somewhere and in a conflict you don't want... enjoyed |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
My goodness, I thought this had fallen by the wayside... thank you all so very much for your wonderful replies! |
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