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Lodestar (Paradelle)
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Lodestar (Paradelle) |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Lodestar Shining bright you guide me forward Shining bright you guide me forward In my sight, zenithal lodestar In my sight, zenithal lodestar You guide me forward in my sight Zenithal lodestar shining bright And by your ray I see darkness And by your ray I see darkness My way trascending through the haze My way trascending through the haze Through the darkness and haze, my way I find, by your trandsending ray I steer again with braver heart I steer again with braver heart Upon new sea of my own fate Upon new sea of my own fate With braver new heart upon sea, Of my own fate, I steer again Lodestar, by your zenithal ray Transcending darkness, you guide me I steer through haze, I find my way Braver of heart upon the sea With new forward-shining in-sight, My Fate, my own, again, and bright [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 06-15-2001).] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Poeminister, when you mention the sea, I feel it all, a very nice read..thank you...gentle smile |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I deeply related to this poem....very much so. Thank you for this one. "This rose has seen red, I have been blue |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very nice job, Poeminister.  All writing comes |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Much enjoyed. Seeking that star right now. Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Everything about this likes me....thank you for this! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Thank you all for your comments and enjoying...It caused a bit of headache writing this though and I forgot to add the repetitions in the first three stanzas, when I first posted this, I don't add them till I'm finished usually... they create the real effect of the paradelle though...hope that its much better now that its edited and a legitmite paradelle. Thank you again... [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 06-15-2001).] |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Very good and talented write. Melton |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Melton--Thanks you for your kind comment. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
 This is great! Must shine at the top again so other poets may find there way to it! |
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