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Mothers (a dedication)
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Mothers (a dedication) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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For two very special women in my life =============== "Your grandmother always had time for you" my mother enthused, as she sat nursing a cup of strained tea. Tomorrow threw up more than its usual uncertainties, etching an invitation to gather at our ritual meeting place, this kitchen table, a hostel for our vulnerable tongues to talk person to person not as mother to son. My grandmother drew her last sigh when I was light with genuine smiles. Still does that doe eyed boy thrive, or was his hearse my itching man-suit? "You are a wise son," not enough she believed to devote to my beloved. I am still a child and the child remains an exotic element. Will he accept when these two loves at last commit? My mother whispered of heart and health, her rural-reasoning healed the apathy of my intellect. I may rest, an artless infant in the depths of my mother's love. From mother to Lover cradling her child, in nestling arms, still cherishes my charms. ------------------- My first major exploration into emotional poetry, without any obscure metaphors. For such a personal poem it was not an easy write. Special thanks to Kamla for great editing advice with the first verse. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-14-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So very well done....and I sincerely hope we soon see more of this side of you.... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The title is deceptively simple...the poem deep and complex. I liked this more than I seem to be able to express at the moment. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Very impressive and complex...I enjoyed this much more than I imagined...when I first read the title...I expected something much less than this.... great work!!! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fantasic Brian. Your writing has really blossomed, I must read more of you! This is exceptionally done, and it reminds us about the importance of taking time to sit and talk with family. Thank you! Corinne |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Brian, I really love this, it's so deep and vivid, I loved every single line Excellent writing! Maree  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Yes, it's very emotional, very moving, Brian, good to see this side of you, I love it. "This rose has seen red, I have been blue |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, this was beautiful Brian. I have always said the best writing comes from the heart. This one shines. All writing comes |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Yes, I too, love to see this tender side of you, Bri. This is a touching, wise tribute Take care, Melissa~ |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Hi Brian, I especially appreciated these lines: "this kitchen table, a hostel for our vulnerable tongues to talk person to person not as mother to son" Thank you for being open to writing, and sharing, such an emotional piece. JULIE |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Brian, this is simply stunning. You handled the issue perfectly. Much enjoyed. Sandra |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Karilea, thank you for very kind words. I hope my muse is kind enough to let me explore this kind of writing more. JLR, thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed the poem. Cpat Hair, your words mean a lot to me, thank you. Corinne, wow... I am blushing here, thank you for your wonderful comments. They mean so much to me. Maree, thanks. Kathleen, thank you. LW, thanks. Melissa, sometimes we tend to take forgranted things that are close to us, I just had to tell a few people how much they mean to me. Thanks for your very kind words. JULIE, it was no trouble sharing. We can all learn from each other's poetry. Thanks. Sandra, thanks. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love this view into your world...and it IS sweet...but sssshhh....I'll not tell anyone, wouldn't want to spoil your reputation!  Absolutely charming! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My grandmother drew her last sigh when I was light with genuine smiles. Still does that doe eyed boy thrive, or was his hearse my itching man-suit? "You are a wise son," not enough she believed to devote to my beloved. I am still a child and the child remains an exotic element. Will he accept when these two loves at last commit? =========================================== "itching man-suit" ...oh man...I love the way your mind works what a cool line...what a cool poem... Yes...I must concur with the above ... I too like seeing this side of your writing, this is beautiful in its honest, sincere intend Bri. later-soulpoet-gator me she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Here I am..late again but here. WOW. I DEFINITELY want to see more of this type of poetry from you...you are very good at it. Changing styles, stretching yourself - makes your writing grow...it's a very sensitive piece Brian. Hey - and you're welcome It's nothing really...glad to help any time k? You're so sweet to do that lol... K |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Seren, thanks for keeping my secret, you know I can't have everyone thinking I got a soft side. Thank you for your wonderful words. Jan, thank you for your continued support and kind words K, you deserved credit for your help. Thank you for the advice and for the big thumbs up. Thanks "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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