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(((Ripples)))
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(((Ripples))) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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(((Ripples))) Stepping over the stones, wandering, coming to play against the soft edges of you, an impulse flamed my dreams. Kept me guessing, twisted thoughts rubbing my serenity, obsessing my awareness. Slowly, reaching into the coolness, reflections rippled their dance, as I skipped each memory to the outer edge, the other side of your hold. A gentle rain folding in, creased the calm, touching off a steam, a heat of desires, rising, to drift off swept away by the breeze, leaving behind a world, dripping in silence, prismed in you. (((Wynter))) "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 06-14-2001).] |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
let me be the first to say i enjoyed reading this one it is very very good  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...prismed in you.... lovely, lovely imagery.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Some very well painted images in this which just add to the flow of thought and feel.. a softness..of chaos... of familiar... enjoyed!!!! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow, I'm surprised so few have replied to this. Many of my teen forum friends have told me to venture out to other places, and poems like this make me glad that I did. This was supremely beautiful. I'm happy to have had to pleasure of reading it. Jenn "If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie.. beside you as you dream, if my heart had wings." Faith Hill |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Whoa! Lovely, especially "prismed in you." |
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IWithinYou Junior Member
since 2001-06-14
Posts 21Within You |
Those last couple lines are extremely expressive and visual. The ending is extremely nice. I consider it only a minor tragedy that I have never been able to follow a rabbit down a hole. I am still puzzled how Alice did that. Ah well, Dare to dream. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wynter, in prisms or dreams you write with such perfect softness and clarity. Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Watersign6 and you will be the first to get my thanks Sunshine, thank you.I have many kaleidoscopes and stained glass pieces all providing me with a prismed look into my world. *s C.. a softness..of chaos... of familiar...yes..you DO understand *s thank you Jenn and I am happy you took the chance to read outside of teens..thank you for your sweet words. VAS ..I am always prismed somehow in my life *s thank you. IWithinYou...thank you and welcome, I love your handle.. Kethry and you are a bright color in the prism of my life...thank you for being a friend ((hugss)) Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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