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Mark
Junior Member

since 2001-06-13

Posts 18

0 posted 2001-06-13 10:10 PM

She was perfect
from hair styled and sprayed into
a helmet to survive
any wind
Lipstick filling
the severely drawn lines

I stiffled yawns
through dinner
Watching in almost alarm
as she raised her fork
Silver tines to pierce
tender salad greens
picked at sparingly
to maintain her
size 6 dress

And as the tortured evening passed
my thoughts fell
to a woman glimpsed in the park
laughing in the rain with a child
in faded levis and a smile
that knew
no lines

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-06-14 02:31 AM

Mark~ I could see this so well.....wonderfully done!

Death
Member

since 2001-05-26

Posts 112
Twilight

2 posted 2001-06-14 07:26 AM

Sounds like outings in the park are called for more frequently.

Well said.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2001-06-14 07:54 AM

Ah.. pretension and layers of formailty or casual open enjoyment... nicely done! I enjoyed this a great deal

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

4 posted 2001-06-14 09:03 AM

very enjoyable

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2001-06-14 09:22 AM

Oooooh I really thought this was great. It makes a lot of sense. Why do people feel the need to be perfect? Honesty and reality are better than fake perfections. Nice job on this.

Jenn

"If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie.. beside you as you dream, if my heart had wings." Faith Hill

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2001-06-14 09:57 AM

Mark--I enjoyed the contrast of looking through your eyes.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

7 posted 2001-06-14 12:13 PM

Oh, reading this was enjoyable...

regards,
sudhir

kitkat
Senior Member

since 2000-01-11

Posts 878
Nova Scotia

8 posted 2001-06-14 12:59 PM

What a fantastic piece of writing. I enjoy your outlook. Perfection has its price...loneliness...My life is far far from perfect but I am happy and very together with the one I Love..:-)

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