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Petite Point
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Petite Point |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Petite point Silver crested clouds at night Dance across the moon in flight. As winds make leaves to play a tune Enhancing trees to Brigadoon. And shadows rise in fantasy To add their touch to lunacy As vibrant rounds creep out the bogs The sounds of strident calling frogs The mist makes webs of interplay In gray and silver interlay. Painting phantoms in the dark Of ghosts and goblins disembark. And eerie shrouds around your mind As leery closes from behind And fear begins to tip the scale And bravery begins to fail. I’ve held the hand of dark of day And prayed there was another way. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 05-22-2001).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I had no idea what to expect when I opened this one, Sy...  I wasn't disappointed, of course - I love the whole poem... but especially the couplet... NATCH...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dear Nan, I've missed you since you've gone away. *L* Sy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This is a perfect example of what is so impressive about your work... the poetic blending and pure perfection of cadence and rhyme, imagery and vision, and then as always, tied up in a bow with the heart and soul couplet of summation. Excellent and way cool too Sy-babes  *ww*  meWe wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Brigadoon, Brigadoon, long lost isle, my heart still tuned to hear your spell, cast it well, call me back to Brigadoon.... call me back, come, talk with me set your eyes on mine to see the love you cast from your spell, ah Brigadoon, you've cast it well.... you set my mind a'wandering, Sy... and I thank you for that... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Your talents never cease to amaze me This was great from beginning to end The master of word usage Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderful poetry from a poetmaster... regards Seymour, Sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, And that's a perfect example of how you fill my heart with raspberry and flatteries tea. Winkiewinkie Stinky Lady, And your comment is a Birgadoon. *L* Elizabeth, And you comment is only exceeded by your beauty and talent. Love Sy Sudhir, I thank you from friend to friend. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Silver crested clouds at night Dance across the moon in flight. As winds make leaves to play a tune Enhancing trees to Brigadoon. beautiful writing enjoyed this one alot. "across the unfair divide |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Brian, Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I missed this the first go round...written as delicately as a petite point stitchery....lovely, work here, sy!!! (Great title for ALL of your work) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This is so like Brigadoon, eerie yet captivating, inviting. I thoroughly enjoyed the read! |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
I’ve held the hand of dark of day And prayed there was another way. Me, too. Your rhyming ability is wonderful. ~A~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Thank you so much for the push. VAS, Glad you enjoyed. Alice, Big thank you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done Sy. . . great flow and a wonderful picture. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
one of the best i've seen from you..... vividly descriptive with excellent cadence and wisdom thanks for the read, sy! |
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