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Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-05-21 09:49 PM

my heart beats for you
my eyes sparkle with your love
the wind speaks your name

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-05-21 09:58 PM

perfect, LW! I do so wish I could do haiku justice!

the wind speaks your name

five syllables and you manage to convey that "presence" felt while in love...just beautiful, lady!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-05-21 10:48 PM

This is truly lovely, Jennifer

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

3 posted 2001-05-22 12:42 PM

Lovely thoughts in this. Nicely done.

Poeminister

mistyrose
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 75
state of anxiety

4 posted 2001-05-22 01:17 AM

Lone Wolf.....

simply put

this is true beauty

great job

mistyrose~*

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-05-22 01:25 AM

lovely, lovely

so much in 3 lines

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

6 posted 2001-05-22 02:00 PM

He sure has heard you
As he turns the wind around
to send you his love

Beautiful haiku you wrote Jennifer

Titia

[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 05-22-2001).]

Morgoth
Junior Member

since 2001-05-21

Posts 26
Baltimore, MD

7 posted 2001-05-22 03:04 PM

For me? Wow thanks. Just kidding.

Great one.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

8 posted 2001-05-22 06:55 PM

back for another read, I really enjoyed this one, Jennifer.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-05-22 07:46 PM

serenity: Thank you, my friend. Aw, come on. Try one, you may just be surprised!

Kathleen: Thank you much!

Poeminister: Happy you enjoyed!

Mistyrose: Sometimes life's joys lie in the simple things.

VAS: You are so right.

Titia: Thank you for the reply. Very beautifully written.

Morgoth: Shhh!! It's supposed to be a secret it's for you!!

Kathleen: You have made me smile, sweetheart.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

10 posted 2001-05-22 08:15 PM

You describe a wonderful and mysterious feeling very well with this form. I love this.

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