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JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

0 posted 2001-06-10 02:11 AM

One Good Line

I need to write
with urgency
yet nothing in my day tells a story
no pain upon my heart beats
nor does love occupy my mind
not dwelling on losses
the why or why not
or dreaming of anyone
past, present, future
there is no passion to this day
but there is calmness
and I know I should be grateful
for a break in the storm
it just seems a bit too quiet
after the driving rain
I find no inspiration here
though aware of the reprieve
I’d trade it for one good line
towards poetic ecstasy

[This message has been edited by JLR (edited 06-10-2001).]

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

1 posted 2001-06-10 02:17 AM

Looks to me like you have more than one good line...hugs sweetie

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2001-06-10 04:19 AM

So write about the calmness! I'm sure you can do that because you just did such a good job explaining how you got there......You got more than one good line left...it'd be more like good writing time!

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-06-10 09:06 AM

What writer wouldn't? I think most of us would, but it can't be forced, it has to come to you. Nicely done, JLR.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

4 posted 2001-06-10 05:58 PM

I like this, everyone feels like this at times.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-06-10 06:20 PM

but, but...I see several...LOL....this is venting in its MOST poetic form!

ParisGrl
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 610

6 posted 2001-06-11 02:26 PM

Writers Block! LOL I think we would like a few good lines.

*hugs*

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2001-06-11 04:16 PM

It is true that without drama, it is hard to find inspiration. But you have found it, nonetheless.

Corinne

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-06-11 04:19 PM

very creative.... and when looking for the one good line.. you found several..

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

9 posted 2001-06-11 04:29 PM

Only one good line you needed and yet you gave us nineteen beautyful ones.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

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