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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Being feminine and sophisticated and deep inside my mind you're the real beyond my whims the blessing of my seasoned time. Yet every time you're gone, not very often, you call faithfully, your familiar voice stirring my old feelings. You're lonely, insecure, calling me to speak our words of meaning entirely written on our hearts and I assure you my love for you will never die. I hear you laugh at my boyishness. I laugh at myself treasuring those tender moments, that place in our love, where recognition of our faithfulness is our existence! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh mon cherie ethome! superb... hear you laugh at my boyishness. I laugh at myself treasuring those tender moments, that place in our love, where recognition of our faithfulness is our existence! I adore the raw faithfulness of this. |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
"You're the real beyond my whims" This is EXCELLENT! So much what I strive to reach in my writing is reflected in yours. I just loved this.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for the comments Serenity and Tovi. I really appreciate your thoughts. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Every woman's treasure.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and deep inside my mind you're the real beyond my whims the blessing of my seasoned time. ========================= how absolutely ehnchanting is that thought...what a simply beautiful soft, subtle understated verse of "forever" and devotion that is. The whole poem is a wonderful declaration but those lines just caught in my chest... nothing left to do but..*sigh*  Love this one Eric!! she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Your words so sweet and true tugged at my heartstrings and leave me room for hope. Thank you for sharing your feelings, for the glimpse into a world that is not always sad. Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Today is philosophy day and your paper warrents merit. Sy |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
philosophical indeed!! a wonderful trip inside the mind. . . you show it well my friend. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--told with much truth of feeling and with a hint of the tenderness in a man's shortcomings. (I hope that makes sense to you, like it does to me) The ending is wonderful! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"you're the real beyond my whims the blessing of my seasoned time" What a lovely line and sentiments shown with these thoughts penned. Excellent writing! Poeminister |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
ethome, I really like this one! So tender and sweet.. I couldn't pick out a favorite line if I wanted to. This was very much enjoyed TaraB |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Eric, this is such a beautiful declaration and sentiments of true love with such an honest appeal! (smiles) True love indeed reveals the greatest joy of ones life; dreaming of my love makes me feel like a happy boy at play in my heart! Loves existence is indeed joys existence! (smiles) Your words are always so sweet and beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You love, write with a depth that goes beyond any I can hope for...such love and tenderness you have shown us in this one.... |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
"you're the real beyond my whims the blessing of my seasoned time" A wonderful poem and an especially wonderful line ethome...... your love  is just lovely..... Thank you ********************** It's only me.......only me |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very romantic and sweet writing here, ethome. I enjoyed this. All writing comes |
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