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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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all my fingers splayed can't hold a single second's ticking time all my thought a nagging rhyme every beat I feel in head another nail in coffin's dead and all my flesh become too weak watermelon in the heat melting thoughts of flies abuzz whisper lies and sing of love every pore become too bold within the blanket of sun's fold porous pieces parts of me expanding single eye of three porous pieces parts of you shatters eye to make it two. porous pieces two eyes see... all the parts make one of me. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well Celeste I read this twice and I don't know whether you're talking about dying or just the ruination of your heart from a love gone bad to the extent that you're are stolidly yourself and no one else...whatever the case it's most interesting writing and I really enjoyed the read! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, you are one of the most desirable writers here..... or maybe its the pic... I don't know... after reading your work I often whisper to myself I want her...  Of course I say that to alot of the fem poets here. ..... Ok, so after reading this piece I want you.  Damn, I hate female poets..... Parker |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ethome? you know already... parker? "Parker??? HEY!!! PARKER!!!!" love ya both...sigh... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a bad word comes to mind "Abstract" the first part in full of some interesting cryptic images but the second half is fully direct and powerful. Take care, hugs. Enjoyed the read. porous pieces parts of me expanding single eye of three porous pieces parts of you shatters eye to make it two. porous pieces two eyes see... all the parts make one of me. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Whew, such a beautifully passionate poem of engulfing desires! (sigh) I know these feelings all so well, it's like the dreams crawl into the pores of your skin and set your heart aflame with lust and endless searching and contemplating! (sigh) Wow, your poems are always filled with such expertise and understanding of this emotion, I enjoy reading your words all the time! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, this was something serenity. You have a very unique style of writing. I am enjoying reading it very much. Great work! All writing comes |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
cast again, my deat lady, thank you kindly, as if i where out for the evening Kindly, |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
Wonderful poetry. Also wondered about death or loss of love and figured they are connected in content, so poem can be either or....or something else entirely! Read it three times. Very good!  I can't control |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I love this also, many different thoughts on the meaning. Your style always sounds so good, I sometimes lose track of what you were saying in the beautiful flow. Sandra |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you do make me smile, even when you don't try to ...hugssssss and keep that beautiful chin up ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
this is truely excellent as all of yours are and i enjoy them so |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
lots of intense thoughts went into this one, Serenity I can feel it! Kathleen Blake |
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