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Truth (needs a little help)
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Truth (needs a little help) |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Funny, how our soul always knows truth No matter the words rushing in on the outside Somewhere deep inside it awakens to be acknowledged or ignored by hearts and minds That tingling of uncertainty when the notes are just a bit off key and we swallow it down or linger on it to open it with shakey fingers Or the complete peace that sweeps over us when all is right A safety or sometimes a disappointment The colors are always real deep inside of our soul ********This needs a rewrite, some thoughts would be appriciated! Thank you! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lovely poem and the truth is well taken from the words..... "Somewhere deep inside it awakens to be acknowledged or ignored by hearts and minds" This verse is so true...I really appreciate that kind of reasoning. This is a poem I wrote about the same thing some time ago. The Truth Of The Matter From the cortex chambers ventriliquists speak with their conscious voices of thought in the soul's quiet palace. They confirm necessities: Amen - and forgiveness, they repair despair, teaching lessons from straw to sticks to bricks. Yet what sad reality, the acceptance of the mediating value of lies, when the truth was never better. Who are they that disguise? body and mind, until they are forced into the open exposed to glib pretentious rote. Yet, all the voices in the palace, ventriloquists of inner thought, remain quantum reminders, that from the heart, to the great light that fills the sky, all accept the gift of consciousness - and in the end, it comes down to the truth of the matter. © Eric True |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
I really like that Ethome, thank you for showing it to me. I'm going to work on this some more and perhaps do a repost.  |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
gentle smile, Tovie, there is nothing wrong with that at all, as there is an old saying from where I am from, let the heart or mind say what it wishes, the gut is never wrong. |
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Truth New Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 3Right Before Your Eyes |
truth you seek help in what Forgiving or Denial Or Definition What help could you need defining self and all beliefs ********************************************* I see nothing wrong nor need of help write on write on the Bard collapsed saying Merely, write on |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
I must agree with the others Tovi...What your heart feels must be put into words is never in need of help. This doesn't stop us from changing our own words, but remeber...the words flow from inside you and read perfectly to me!  Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Logan - Thank you so much. I think I felt this lacked poetic beauty, that the wording could have been better. But I very much like your old saying. You left me with a smile. Thank you! Truth - (Your name and my title ) I think what I was exploring was definition and that everyone has "Truth" deep inside of them if they reach deep enough and trust it? Are we born owning truth or do we find our own truths on the way? If that makes any sense? Thank you for your words.... Azblond - Thank you! I did feel very uncertain of this one, in attempting to capture what I was trying to. |
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