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The Quiet Ones
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The Quiet Ones |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
"The Quiet Ones" by:Kelli Kay (c)2001 watch out for the quiet ones thats what people always say why do they draw conclusions before they know anything maybe if they were quiet for a change they'd hear what we dont say silence is golden my rule for today creativeness flows into this space loneliness exists in everyones heart you can take a look at my mind just dont pick it apart my heart tells my mind to write whats real my hand follows the command and prints the words I've concealed my heart tells my mind to write what I feel look at things differently with a minds eye instilled view the unfulfilled acknowledge yourself bring your free will watch out for the quiet ones they sometimes get too loud turning the tables bringing the crowds freeing minds independent child watch out for the quiet ones they sometimes get too loud |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Good expression, and a good flow of words. Perhaps if you'd hang it on a bit of structure, a comma or two, a period, and maybe a rhyme pattern, But that is just my bias to form. A fine random flow. Gloom |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
"My heart tells my mind to write what I feel" I love it... Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
So much truth packed into this piece... alot can be learned from the "quiet ones".. Great writing~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oh, I like this one!! Much enjoyed!!  All writing comes |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderful write, watersign. Enjoyed this very much. Poeminister |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
The world is filled with introverts and extroverts and every imaginable combination in between....I consider myself about right in the middle...yet some consider me a quiet one...James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
maybe if they were quiet for a change they'd hear what we dont say silence is golden my rule for today creativeness flows into this space loneliness exists in everyones heart you can take a look at my mind just dont pick it apart my heart tells my mind to write whats real my hand follows the command and prints the words I've concealed ========================= theres a whole lot of wisdom in these words... this is a very cool collection of thoughts and inspire... very well done she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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PoemCrazy Member
since 2000-11-30
Posts 159 |
some stuff to read if you're interested: http://www.library.utoronto.ca/utel/rp/poetterm.html |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Oh yes..I love what you have said here, and you have used all the right words to bring it together. I know these thoughts as I am generally a quiet one myself. Excellent! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
P.Gloom-thanks for reading it and for the suggestions azblond-thank you very much Butterflies-glad you enjoyed it Lonewolf-thanks my poet friend Poeminister-thanks for the nice words James-glad you enjoyed the read JanetMarie-thanks a million PoemCrazy-thanks for the webpage and i will have to check it out,also thanks for reading my poem Temptress-your too kind,thanks |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely said... it is the quiet ones..the ones who do listen... enjoyed! |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Well said. I've always had a deep admiration for the quiet ones. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
very well said, enjoyed the read. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Silence can indeed be golden, other times it can be a prison. Enjoyed! Kathleen Blake |
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Captivating1 Junior Member
since 2001-06-07
Posts 15Houston, TX |
Very nice...and oh sooo true:-) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hey WS6, I'm one of those quiet ones. . .  well, at least that's what they say. . . great job with this one. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Get loud...loved this! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Cphat-thank you Tovi-thanks alot Charisma-glad you enjoyed Irish Rose-so happy your reading mine Captivating1-thank you Sven-good to know your enjoying mine JLR-VERY FUNNY-LOL! how's that for LOUD,capitals means i am shouting ya know,hehe thanks very much everyone for taking the time to read mine and for your kind replies  |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
very nice, KK, and says so much...gentle smile |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Thanks so very much Logan |
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